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by Muse_Clio
September 10th, 2018, 1:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Briseis
Replies: 4
Views: 1012

Re: Query Briseis

It was Helen’s fault. That’s what they all said. If Helen hadn’t eloped with Paris, her husband never would have called upon his brother, Agamemnon. If Agamemnon hadn’t thus been obligated to retrieve his brother’s wayward wife, he never would have sent a thousand ships across the sea to Troy. If he...
by Muse_Clio
September 6th, 2018, 5:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Children of the Night
Replies: 0
Views: 416

Query: Children of the Night

Ok, to be honest, this isn't technically a query, but I wasn't sure where else to ask. I am in the process of finishing and polishing my current work and am now starting to brainstorm queries; however, I have hit a snag, the genre is eluding me. It is about vampires, but only tangentially, so might ...
by Muse_Clio
September 6th, 2018, 5:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Forest Whispers
Replies: 1
Views: 616

Re: Query - Forest Whispers

Ok. You are all over the place here. When you rewrite, which I think you should, these are my thoughts. These are the elements that I see could be interesting. But I don't know enough about your story to really say. In the first paragraph: After a wildfire starts and everything around her is on fire...
by Muse_Clio
June 4th, 2018, 1:42 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Marketing Information?
Replies: 2
Views: 1111

Re: Marketing Information?

Hi, thank you for the time you took to respond. I've read through the post and must say that the book I'm trying to query is not nonfiction, it's historical/mythological fiction. I'm new in the field so I don't have any famous author reviews of previous books or any New York Times Best Seller listed...
by Muse_Clio
May 26th, 2018, 7:06 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Marketing Information?
Replies: 2
Views: 1111

Marketing Information?

I'm looking at querying a publisher directly and they ask for any "Marketing Information". Does anybody have any idea what this means?

Thanks

Clio
by Muse_Clio
May 25th, 2018, 11:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Briseis
Replies: 4
Views: 1012

Re: Query Briseis

JT Shea, can I ask why you prefer the other version? (Just as an FWI, this version has been reworked slightly, posted below.) NEW: It was Helen’s fault. That’s what they all said. If Helen hadn’t eloped with Paris, her husband never would have called upon his brother, Agamemnon. If Agamemnon hadn’t ...
by Muse_Clio
May 25th, 2018, 1:32 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Briseis
Replies: 4
Views: 1012

Query Briseis

It was Helen’s fault. That’s what they all said. If Helen hadn’t eloped with Paris, Menelaos never would have called upon his brother Agamemnon to fulfill his pledge. If Agamemnon hadn’t been obligated to retrieve his brother’s wayward wife, he never would have sent a thousand ships across the sea. ...
by Muse_Clio
May 25th, 2018, 1:29 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Euthanasia Query. :)
Replies: 1
Views: 1971

Re: Euthanasia Query. :)

There should be a paragraph break between the last sentence of the query "Disadvantage" and the first sentence of your descriptor "This (word count)". What's the title of the work? What's the Genre? What's the word count? Don't tell what the novel depicts, the query should have done that for you. Yo...
by Muse_Clio
May 25th, 2018, 1:11 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Power Vested Within
Replies: 1
Views: 1503

Re: Query - The Power Vested Within

Hi, I'm also new here! Your query was the most recent one on the forum so I thought I'd pop in. First things first, I think "Fiercely independent criminal" is good! It's different. Attention getting. Now, your second sentence doesn't really work. How does he know why they are after him? What's the c...
by Muse_Clio
May 25th, 2018, 12:37 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: NEW - Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 27
Views: 16008

Re: NEW - Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Mr. Bransford, When war threatened their city, Briseis’ father sent her inland to safety, to an arranged marriage. Briseis had never wanted to be a queen, and the betrothal was her idea of hell. When the invading army sacked her adoptive city, her wish to escape her wedding day came true, but i...