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- October 13th, 2012, 9:31 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: YA Dystopian Pitch
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3082
Re: YA Dystopian Pitch
What about this? Sixteen-year-old Maggie Spencer decides to conduct her own investigation when the police furtively label her missing lab partner, Oliver McCray, a runaway. She was, after all, the last person to see him before he disappeared, and she has at least one clue the police don’t: Oliver’s ...
- October 12th, 2012, 11:25 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Children's Picture Book Query
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1857
Re: Children's Picture Book Query
Hi Kristie, I've never written a children's book, but here it goes... Five-year-old Bridget loves dolls, animals, tea parties and building sandcastles, but definitely not bugs. While building a sandcastle outside, she’s bugged by a butterfly and becomes scared. As the 2nd sentence in the query, this...
- October 12th, 2012, 10:47 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
- Replies: 3
- Views: 5364
Re: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
@klbritt: Thanks for the feedback! I love the idea about an overheard conversation. I've been going in circles about what to do with that scene, and I'm going to try your suggestion. Yes, proudly, the novel is done! I'm in editing/feedback mode right now, so I'd love you to take a look at it if you ...
- October 11th, 2012, 12:56 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: **Updated**Excerpt - YA Dystopian -- Untouchable
- Replies: 4
- Views: 5057
Re: **Updated**Excerpt - YA Dystopian -- Untouchable
UNTOUCHABLE (working title) I'm all about slicing things down, so here is my re-worked version. Hope this helps! By the way, awesome job! I admire your eye from language and description. If you ever need someone to swap novels with, let me know. I am in the process of editing a YA dystopian, too. A...
- October 11th, 2012, 12:29 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
- Replies: 3
- Views: 5364
Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
I wrote this prologue to introduce world and develop the conflict for the MC, Oliver. I worry it's not as eye-catching as a first page needs to be. Any feedback is welcome! Also, the rest of the novel is in first person; is it cheating to have a 3rd person prologue? The Underground: Prologue Princi...
- October 10th, 2012, 11:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: YA Dystopian Pitch
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3082
YA Dystopian Pitch
Having trouble with the pitch section of my query. My novel is from multiple POVs and I want the pitch to be concise, but it's proving difficult. Any help would be much appreciated! Here's what I got so far: Option 1: Everyone used to go to school for free. Seriously. Thanks to the FACTS exams, onl...