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- September 11th, 2012, 11:05 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Night Falls: YA Fantasy
- Replies: 12
- Views: 3236
Thank you to Lurking Virologist, bananas and dorothy inman for all of your additional help! Your input is incredibly beneficial. I've been procrastinating doing any querying (fear of failure and all, dumb I know!) but I think I've finally decided to do it and came by to see if there was anything els...
Perfect! Just what I needed to know. Thanks again!BettyMiller wrote:Hi! I just read your update post, and I think I actually prefer the first one. the second version gives too much detail that kind of takes away from the suspense, it almost feels unfocused.
Thanks to you both, BettyMiller and clegler! Were you folks referring to my most recent version (in the comments) or the original post? I'm not sure how I feel about the paragraph I added in the revised.
- June 15th, 2012, 5:18 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY - The Vanguard: Uprising
- Replies: 12
- Views: 2190
I really would like to help you out with yours, as you've helped me with mine, but I am definitely not well-suited for it. One of the things that turns me off of a high-fantasy (and although this might not be high-fantasy, it reminds me of it) is when I'm reading the back of a book and am assaulted ...
I think that you've hit all of the basic points that one should in a query. All of my suggestions are just about cleaning up the copy - I hope it wasn't too forward of me to mess around a little! Dear Scooby-Doo: The thieves named her Demon. In Satani's opinion, the name is not needed to make her di...
The same query, with an additional paragraph: -- The land of the Dead, Exit, has never been more frightening. Souls are turning to stone. The world has fallen into perpetual night. And a legendary evil – the Man With No Eyes – is threatening to take over it all. Until fourteen-year-old Jacqueline Pu...
- June 15th, 2012, 12:46 pm
- Forum: Ask Nathan
- Topic: Querying for illustrations in YA
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2409
Hey Nathan! I've run into a bit of a dilemma with my querying. A very talented artist has taken on illustrating my YA fantasy. I would appreciate if her work was published with my novel, but we both agreed that it would not be necessary if it would impede my publication/finding an agent. How would I...
Hey there! I actually think what you have is pretty good. Yes, there is not a lot of verbiage, but what you do have hits what I think are the key points of the book. I'm no expert at query editing, but from what I can see it really just needs more description, but it seems like you have gotten to t...
Hey all! Long-time lurker, first-time poster. I always said to myself that I'd never be able to post my query for everyone to hack-and-slash, but how else am I supposed to know if it's any good? My novel is complete, revised and revised and now it's two years later! I'm just waiting on the last of a...