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by spauff
July 3rd, 2013, 2:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDER
Replies: 4
Views: 5424

Re: Query: THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDER

I really like your story -- great voice -- and I love historical fiction, so this sounds like something I would definitely read. A few things to improve: -- I agree with the above comments about Tinderbus's writing -- who is he writing them for? A newspaper? Explain. Also what is he optimistic about...
by spauff
July 3rd, 2013, 12:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: New Query: Mr. Write (new adult, but also pitching as women'
Replies: 0
Views: 1164

New Query: Mr. Write (new adult, but also pitching as women'

Joanna “Jo” Elliott’s perfect man? Tall, dark and imaginary. Since her last relationship ended in heartbreak three years ago, Jo has spent more quiet nights at home with a good book than out on good dates, and she daydreams more about fictional men than real ones. But when one of her favorite litera...
by spauff
July 3rd, 2013, 12:43 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: New Query: Shadowplay
Replies: 2
Views: 4407

Re: New Query: Shadowplay

I don't think you need either of the opening lines. I'd open with Lily's introduction, making that first sentence it's own paragraph. It's punchy enough and it gets us to the main character right away. I'd cut the paragraph about Jacob. It sounds good, but it's a subplot and you want to just get the...
by spauff
August 5th, 2012, 4:20 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for critique partner for women's fiction/chick lit
Replies: 1
Views: 3424

Looking for critique partner for women's fiction/chick lit

Hello! I'm looking for a critique partner interested in reading my manuscript. It's had a one full critique, as well as several chapter critiques, and been edited and rewritten numerous times, but I think it needs one more full read before I start querying. I'm cutting it right now -- ideally I'd li...
by spauff
May 16th, 2011, 3:59 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Do you keep your drafts?
Replies: 13
Views: 3657

Do you keep your drafts?

I was thinking about this question last night and was just curious -- do you keep all the drafts of your work? I'm in the process of packing and moving to a new apartment. I'm also in the middle of revising my novel again, and yesterday, when I started packing up my desk, I avoided packing up the pr...
by spauff
May 16th, 2011, 2:11 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Dream sequences -- too cliched?
Replies: 14
Views: 2334

Re: Dream sequences -- too cliched?

Thanks, Watcher. I did end up trying it a different way. I took the dream sequence out of the first chapter, but writing another one later for the third chapter, and I think it works. I plan on passing off the beginning chapters to a critique partner within the next week, so we'll see...
by spauff
April 19th, 2011, 10:54 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Dream sequences -- too cliched?
Replies: 14
Views: 2334

Re: Dream sequences -- too cliched?

Dreams are usually used to relate some self analysis and emotional growth of the character which can usually be done in a way that also brings conflict and tension to the story. I think the reason they are considered "cliches" and are somewhat unwanted in novels is because usually when they are use...
by spauff
April 18th, 2011, 1:56 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Dream sequences -- too cliched?
Replies: 14
Views: 2334

Re: Dream sequences -- too cliched?

By the way, why do you want to figure out a different method if this is how your story should play out? I read an online article in a writer's magazine about agent pet peeves (dream sequences was one) and sort of freaked out. :/ I feel a bit better about it now. I think I'm going to wait until I ge...
by spauff
April 18th, 2011, 11:05 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Dream sequences -- too cliched?
Replies: 14
Views: 2334

Dream sequences -- too cliched?

Should you ever have the character waking up from a dream in the first chapter? Right now, I've got that in the first chapter of my novel manuscript, but I'm worried that it's too cliched. Here's my problem: My main character has a creative, imaginative personality -- she's a bookworm and sometimes,...
by spauff
April 17th, 2011, 3:34 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a critique partner for chick-lit novel
Replies: 1
Views: 1203

Looking for a critique partner for chick-lit novel

I'm looking for someone to exchange chapters with for my chick-lit novel, "Mr. Write." I've also used Critique Circle a couple times and liked it, but I want one person be able to see and critique the novel as a whole. Plus, more eyes are always better. The basic premise (I haven't written a formal ...