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by D.Bond
December 11th, 2010, 7:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Deleted
Replies: 11
Views: 1539

Re: Crossing Thresholds

It's 1976. Everyone looks old to Mary, even the young people. Maybe it's the long hair and scraggly beards of the dirty, bare-foot, shirtless dudes. Or maybe it's the sagging, braless breasts flagrantly flopping like freak flags below the rock star T-shirts of the ironed hair, glassy-eyed 1970s chic...
by D.Bond
November 26th, 2010, 3:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN
Replies: 8
Views: 1410

Re: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN

Tim Mann has no soul. Good line. It's nice and straight to the point. Or at least that’s what the latest popular computer application says. I think having popular in there kinda catches the reader, it interrupts the flow of the sentence. Saddled already with a worsening and debilitating heart probl...
by D.Bond
November 16th, 2010, 7:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE HEART OF BELDESSARIO - Fantasy (Newer Draft on page 2)
Replies: 15
Views: 3307

Re: THE HEART OF BELDESSARIO - Fantasy (New Draft on page 2)

Tessa is young, talented, and blind. Very intriguing, you don't see many blind main characters. This'll definitely set your novel apart from others. She walks alongside the canals of Beldessario and plays her dulcimer An instrument? for strangers, seeing only their auras So, she's not completely bli...
by D.Bond
November 16th, 2010, 6:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy Query -- Glory or Death, 4th rev.
Replies: 15
Views: 2935

Re: YA Fantasy Query -- Glory or Death, 4th rev.

Ayla, A THERIAN Just a notice, but I don't think Ayla's a therian. Notice that she put: When the mageian and therian competitors meet for the first time on the first day of the war, Loran stands on the therian side. Just wanted to point that out, that's all. :) Ayla didn't care that she was created...
by D.Bond
November 8th, 2010, 12:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
Replies: 19
Views: 3733

Re: Romance Query: COVET

Dear Agent, Adelais knows she shouldn’t love Lucas, and not because he stuffed frogs down her smock when they were children. Good image. But because he’s a professional soldier for the King’s Elite Army, a trained killer always a step away from death. Does this kingdom have a lot of enemies? Yet , w...
by D.Bond
November 7th, 2010, 10:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Breaking the Rules (Chick Lit)
Replies: 17
Views: 3150

Re: Query - Breaking the Rules (Chick Lit)

Dear Ms/Mr X: BREAKING THE RULES is a fast-paced chick-lit novel that tells the story of what happens when you have to redefine the rules of love, friendship and family in order to find yourself. This should definitely be moved to the word count. It just delays the awesomeness of the actual story co...
by D.Bond
November 1st, 2010, 11:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: BLACK TRIANGLE
Replies: 11
Views: 1710

Re: Query: BLACK TRIANGLE

Dear agent: College students Travis Maguire, Lexie Collins, and her older brother Burke discover the wreck of a black triangular UFO in Washington, D.C.’s Rock Creek Park. But when Burke steps in a trap, Travis and Lexie have to leave him to get help and face an indifferent city police department. T...
by D.Bond
November 1st, 2010, 11:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - New Revision - Revision #3
Replies: 15
Views: 2717

Re: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - YA Sci-Fi / Fantasy

Magellan’s life is turned upside down when the King rips him from his family and takes him to the royal residences. Confused and alone, Magellan is thrust into a world of nobles that want nothing to do with the son of the most hated man in the galaxy. :( This isn't a very exciting opening. I don't g...
by D.Bond
October 28th, 2010, 6:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: RESCUE MY SOUL - YA Gritty Novel
Replies: 10
Views: 1549

Re: RESCUE MY SOUL - YA Gritty Novel

Nineteen year-old Janet Nakano loves her brother Jude. That's why she has to kill his girlfriend. This is a great hook. Makes me instantly interested in where this is going to go. Janet and Jude have always been by each other's side since elementary school . While showing that they've been together ...
by D.Bond
October 28th, 2010, 6:14 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 618
Views: 193336

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hello~ I've been a lurker for the forums for a few months now, no where near the years of some! I'm working on a novel with my best friend (aka the other half of my brain) and I love pretty much all genres. I started writing when I was about seven and luckily my skills have improved. I've had plenty...