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Reworked Version is on the THIRD page!!!! Vitiosus, the dark warrior prince, is feared by all of Lassertian. But in this war-loving land, where the lesser humans are hunted and hung, Vitiosus secretly longs for something no warrior would ever consider - peace. All Vitiosus’ life the King punished h...

Word Count: 250 Title: OVERCAST SHADOWS Someone was going to die today. There was no other choice: it was kill or die. Vitiosus stared at the tall, bulky warrior and took a deep breath to calm his anxious nerves. He stepped slowly forward, the gravel crunching below and the wisps of wind swirling ab...

I have been working on several novels at once, thus unable to update my blog much, lol. But either way this is the most recent book I am finished and I am very excited about querying it. The one problem I am seeing myself is that its a tad long, but hopefully you guys can help me out with that. Main...

Dear Agent: lor=#FF0000]Here I go![/color] Valeriah is half werewolf, unable to take wolf form but still inconveniently driven by the full moon I think you could have a stronger hook. . Her werewolf strength and instincts make her a prized bodyguard for the elite and powerful of the magical realm. W...

I started querying on the 18th. Sent 9 letters so far. Got four form rejections already, including a 22min one from our favorite agent Nathan. I felt depressed for a good hour, but kept my head up. That was yesterday. Today I got two requests for a full, one of them includes an agent who's in my &q...

hey, I swear. Doesn't everyone at times?

Well I have a bit of violence in my book so I usually do tell my readers that there will be blood and gore and swords and battles and head chopping.

Hate open endings unless this is a trilogy or whatnot. If it isn't then I feel like I spend needless time on the book.

The first novel I wrote the first draft sucked @SS! But as I continiue writing I really pay attention to mistakes and issues so I can change them right there so I think my next first draft is not too bad. Could take editing for sure but not a complete scrap and rewrite like my other one did.

I actually like your first one bigheadx! I have been suffering with my query and I have not given this template a try. Here goes... Vitiosus is a Lassertian prince living in Seramia. But when an old warrior tells him of his real half-human identity that the king despises him for, Vitiosus must fight...

Any takers?

First queries are toughies! Prepare to revise! lol. Don't worry, I am not taunting you. Dear Agent, Cat’s I don't know but cat makes me think of the animal. Maybe its just me and the fact that I never heard that name before. new boyfriend, Johnny, is pretty amazing. He can read minds, control elect...

Thanks guys for all your great critique! I took a while off if you have not noticed. OFF WRITING Completley!! Crazy eh? lol. But anyways I think it really refreshed my mind and I am quite happy with my newer version of my query. Tell me if its bad though! I have thick skin! I personally think that t...

1) yes 2) Form rejection Don't get me wrong, its a good query but it doesn't exactly grip me. This could be just me personal perception but what I see here is the same problem I have. there is really lots of plot telling and that sort of makes me skim. I think that your character comes off a bit fla...

Thanks lunerunit and Mel! You guys give great advice, but jeeze this thing is driving me crazy! That doesn't mean you guys should take it easy on me lol. Can't wait for more critique and please be as harsh as you can, because I love this book :D. Agent, Raised by his father to hate humans, Vitiosus ...