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by J. T. SHEA
June 10th, 2020, 8:31 am
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 630
Views: 241749

Re: The Introduction Thread

Yes indeed! Mostly writers posting pages or queries for critiques at the moment. Nathan's blog is well worth checking out too.
by J. T. SHEA
March 5th, 2020, 12:38 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query critique 3/5/20
Replies: 2
Views: 4273

Re: Query critique 3/5/20

July 11th!? I've lost four months!? Must be time travel...Or too many Monster drinks...
by J. T. SHEA
January 31st, 2020, 6:05 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis Mystery Novel
Replies: 1
Views: 5886

Re: Synopsis Mystery Novel

An interesting mystery thriller with a downbeat ending. Your synopsis is clear and succinct, Just one quibble:- “She is able to log into his laptop after a couple of unsuccessful attempts and discovers a lab document. She realizes who is the killer. She tries to log into his laptop but cannot guess ...
by J. T. SHEA
December 30th, 2019, 6:06 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: DEEP POV
Replies: 1
Views: 2349

Re: DEEP POV

I'm not quite sure about Deep POV being the latest rage. Your piece seems in a fairly normal POV to me. Perhaps I am just so used to Deep POV that I take it for granted. Anyway, I'll just reproduce your piece with a few suggestions:- Gideon awoke to the blare of sirens. A bright light hurt his eyes ...
by J. T. SHEA
December 6th, 2019, 7:06 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Thanks for 10 years!!
Replies: 1
Views: 4830

Re: Thanks for 10 years!!

Illustrious? But I don't have any tatoos! Oh, wait... But seriously, thanks to you, Nathan for creating this place and to my esteemed predecessors as moderators, and to all the many members. When you started these forums I had absolutely no idea the publishing industry would still be alive and activ...
by J. T. SHEA
July 25th, 2019, 7:03 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Canada or New Zealand
Replies: 2
Views: 4789

Re: Canada or New Zealand

To visit, live, or invade? Canada is closer for invasion and we have more experience, having invaded it five times during the 1812 War. Also see “SOUTH PARK THE MOVIE”. But do be careful, those wily Canadians have been lulling us into a false sense of security now for 200 years! New Zealand might be...
by J. T. SHEA
June 1st, 2019, 4:03 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What's your favorite writing spot?
Replies: 6
Views: 4121

Re: What's your favorite writing spot?

I assume (and hope!) your roof is flat, unless you straddle its apex, which would quite literally be PEAK creativity! My roof slopes at 45 degrees. Speaking of songs, I could probably fiddle on my roof, if I knew how to fiddle. But I write on a computer in an ordinary room, which does have a view of...
by J. T. SHEA
May 24th, 2019, 7:07 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you choose your novel's perspective?
Replies: 2
Views: 2903

Re: How do you choose your novel's perspective?

A very good question, Nathan! My answer(s) might be all of the above, depending on the story. But I've always been drawn to the Observer/Narrator POV, the “Watson/Boswell” approach, as in James Boswell's biography of his friend Dr. Samuel Johnson, in non-fiction, and the Sherlock Holmes stories and ...
by J. T. SHEA
December 6th, 2018, 12:09 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Soham Railway Incident-Historical Fictional Short
Replies: 1
Views: 3705

Re: Soham Railway Incident-Historical Fictional Short

The Soham Station Incident It was June second, 1944. Benjamin Gimbert adjusted his cap and looked out over the Whitemoor Marshalling yard. A thick haze clung above the cargo cars blacking out any light cast down by the celestial bodies. The smell of coal soot and hot iron rails permeated every cubi...
by J. T. SHEA
December 5th, 2018, 7:51 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Soham Railway Incident-Historical Fictional Short
Replies: 2
Views: 2732

Re: Soham Railway Incident-Historical Fictional Short

Interesting, SubatomicHobo! And based on a real event. But it's not a query. You might consider moving it to 'Excerpts'.
by J. T. SHEA
November 3rd, 2018, 12:35 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Would it be fine for you to give me some critiques? Thank you!
Replies: 0
Views: 4058

Re: Would it be fine for you to give me some critiques? Thank you!

This is a short, sharp and interesting piece that I liked. I did not find the dialogue and plot cheesy. Mysterious yes, but intriguing. Are the bracketed words and phrases part of the text or notes to yourself? The piece is present tense but you do lapse into past tense a few times, as in:- “A sudde...
by J. T. SHEA
October 11th, 2018, 6:08 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: New Member Intro
Replies: 1
Views: 4317

Re: New Member Intro

30 tabs open in the brain? I know the feeling, Becky! Plus pop-ups and error messages galore in my brain at times. And amen regarding thanks to Nathan! While these forums can be quiet at times there are always people online, no doubt exploring the 200,000 posts (!) by 3,500 members over 9 years so f...
by J. T. SHEA
June 27th, 2018, 9:51 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Hunted Chapter 1........ 1st 500 Words
Replies: 1
Views: 2634

Re: Hunted Chapter 1........ 1st 500 Words

This is certainly intriguing and different! I quite like it. The protagonist's narration is distinctive and formal but not obscurely antique, and conveys character and setting very succinctly. I'm curious to hear other readers' comments.
by J. T. SHEA
June 26th, 2018, 10:02 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: When do I look for an Agent?
Replies: 1
Views: 5429

Re: When do I look for an Agent?

My understanding is that one does not query agents until the novel is complete. Only then do they (and you) know that you can tell the whole story.
by J. T. SHEA
May 26th, 2018, 9:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Briseis
Replies: 5
Views: 5347

Re: Query Briseis

While you described the characters interestingly in the second query, the first query's concentration on just Briseis and Achilles may be more effective, telling us what you intend to emphasize in the Troy story. One addition I might make to the first query is to spell out that it is about the Troja...