DEEP POV
Posted: December 21st, 2019, 3:21 pm
As you may already know, DEEP POV (Point of View) is the latest rage and I am reading all kinds of books on it in an attempt to understand how to do it. Here is my latest attempt. Any suggestions for improvement would be greatly appreciated.
Gideon awoke to sirens, a bright light hurt his eyes and he was instantly nauseous and dizzy, but at least the voices in his head had stopped. . Below him he saw a pool of blood and a human female's corpse lying on the floor next to him. As he looked down, there was a woman's motionless body, whose pulps were the size of small saucers in his pitch-black bedroom.
Around the edges of the bright light stood a huge man in an all-black uniform with a gold badge with a scar on his face stood over Gideon, urging him to get out of bed.
A strange voice ordered, "Wake up, young man, there is a dead woman lying here on the floor beside you!"
The man pointed a blue steel pistol barrel at Gideon's head. Gideon backed against the bedroom wall, and said, "This is strange. You're kidding, right?"
Gideon awoke to sirens, a bright light hurt his eyes and he was instantly nauseous and dizzy, but at least the voices in his head had stopped. . Below him he saw a pool of blood and a human female's corpse lying on the floor next to him. As he looked down, there was a woman's motionless body, whose pulps were the size of small saucers in his pitch-black bedroom.
Around the edges of the bright light stood a huge man in an all-black uniform with a gold badge with a scar on his face stood over Gideon, urging him to get out of bed.
A strange voice ordered, "Wake up, young man, there is a dead woman lying here on the floor beside you!"
The man pointed a blue steel pistol barrel at Gideon's head. Gideon backed against the bedroom wall, and said, "This is strange. You're kidding, right?"