Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Dear Agent

Great concept but the query is somewhat wordy . Try to streamline it to around 250 words. It is also confusing because you have too many names in the text.

Using double spaces between your paragraphs will make it a little easier to read

boatbuilder wrote:Great concept but the query is somewhat wordy . Try to streamline it to around 250 words. It is also confusing because you have too many names in the text.

Using double spaces between your paragraphs will make it a little easier to read

Thanks so much. I think you're right. I do need to space it but didn't because I was trying to fit it all on one page, of course lol. I'm going to start over I think instead of just editing this one. I appreciate your feedback!

I'm going to revise it & not include some names & report!

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