The Evolution of Janie YA query
Posted: June 27th, 2010, 4:19 pm
**I'm editing to include a second query choice in this post as well (also in post #3)
This is my most recent attemp at my query. I had some success with my previous query but I've since done major rewrites and need a new query. I'm open to all feedback! Thanks! :) Ang
**First Query**
"You’ll die curing them." Not exactly the words Janie Carter expects to hear from her brother minutes after learning her boyfriend, Marcus is a shape shifter.
Janie is used to being hurt. Now she just wants to be invisible. Then a simple bet puts her at the center of a town feud between shifters craving control of their people and those wanting freedom from their infection. Both groups believe Janie, who carries the mark of the raven, will be the one with the power to achieve their goal.
But no one is prepared for what Janie’s presence will mean for them when she makes a choice that brings her mother, the most dangerous Shifter back to town. And with the supernatural tales about her family’s origins, Janie learns she may be a whole new breed of shifter.
THE EVOLUTION OF JANIE, a paranormal YA novel (82,000 words) is it a stand alone novel, the first in a planned three-book trilogy.
**Second Choice**
People only hurt you. It’s an adage Janie Carter holds onto since first her father and then her mother deserted her. But Janie’s heritage goes further than a mother who is determined to see her dead. Her family legacy is built on an ancient legend and myth that will change who and what she will become.
Janie’s a “new blood” in Everett, Montana and everyone seems to be hiding something. When she starts dating Marcus, the town begins to split and Marcus must reveal the truth behind the town secret. They are Shifters, infected by the blood of the first shape shifter, and have been waiting for a prophecy to be fulfilled by The One marked by the Raven. A mark just like one on Janie’s back.
The problem for Janie is that both sides of town see her death as the only way to get what they want and fulfill the prophecy. As Janie’s carefully constructed walls crumble around her and her sense of reality is destroyed, she must face the warring desires of the town for power and a cure.
THE EVOLUTION OF JANIE is a paranormal YA novel, complete at 82,000 words and is the first in a planned trilogy.
This is my most recent attemp at my query. I had some success with my previous query but I've since done major rewrites and need a new query. I'm open to all feedback! Thanks! :) Ang
**First Query**
"You’ll die curing them." Not exactly the words Janie Carter expects to hear from her brother minutes after learning her boyfriend, Marcus is a shape shifter.
Janie is used to being hurt. Now she just wants to be invisible. Then a simple bet puts her at the center of a town feud between shifters craving control of their people and those wanting freedom from their infection. Both groups believe Janie, who carries the mark of the raven, will be the one with the power to achieve their goal.
But no one is prepared for what Janie’s presence will mean for them when she makes a choice that brings her mother, the most dangerous Shifter back to town. And with the supernatural tales about her family’s origins, Janie learns she may be a whole new breed of shifter.
THE EVOLUTION OF JANIE, a paranormal YA novel (82,000 words) is it a stand alone novel, the first in a planned three-book trilogy.
**Second Choice**
People only hurt you. It’s an adage Janie Carter holds onto since first her father and then her mother deserted her. But Janie’s heritage goes further than a mother who is determined to see her dead. Her family legacy is built on an ancient legend and myth that will change who and what she will become.
Janie’s a “new blood” in Everett, Montana and everyone seems to be hiding something. When she starts dating Marcus, the town begins to split and Marcus must reveal the truth behind the town secret. They are Shifters, infected by the blood of the first shape shifter, and have been waiting for a prophecy to be fulfilled by The One marked by the Raven. A mark just like one on Janie’s back.
The problem for Janie is that both sides of town see her death as the only way to get what they want and fulfill the prophecy. As Janie’s carefully constructed walls crumble around her and her sense of reality is destroyed, she must face the warring desires of the town for power and a cure.
THE EVOLUTION OF JANIE is a paranormal YA novel, complete at 82,000 words and is the first in a planned trilogy.