CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

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CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by ljkuhnley » March 12th, 2010, 3:38 pm

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Re: CEDRIC- Chapter 1 (MG Fantasy)

Post by kenpochick » March 12th, 2010, 4:41 pm

That's adorable! I would definitely keep reading.

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Re: CEDRIC- Chapter 1 (MG Fantasy)

Post by gonzo2802 » March 12th, 2010, 5:14 pm

So far, I think the story is super cute.

The only thing I'm not sure of, is weather or not the average middle grade reader would know what stalactites are. I can't remember how old I was when we learned about that stuff. Other than that, I think the story has a really nice flow.

Good job!

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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by ljkuhnley » March 13th, 2010, 12:54 pm

Thanks Ken and Gonzo

I asked my son (he's nine) and he knows what stalactites are. I'll quiz the kids at the bus stop on Monday though. Thanks again.

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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by mmcdonald64 » March 14th, 2010, 10:16 pm

I know next to nothing of this genre, but I loved this opening. I was disappointed when I came to the end of the excerpt because I'd forgotten it was just an excerpt. lol. Guess I'll just have to wait and buy the book. ;-)

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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by KaylingR » March 15th, 2010, 10:07 am

This is charming! I don't know anything about MG, but I would read this to my son.

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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by ljkuhnley » March 16th, 2010, 7:31 am

Thanks Mmcdonald and Kayling

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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by Ryan » March 16th, 2010, 1:02 pm

That was a fun little read. I immediately related to Cedric by flashing back to PE and other middle-school times of fear. I would assume there's "the girl" in the story? How about posting the part where Cedric meets her for the first time? Everything flowed. Nice
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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by ljkuhnley » March 16th, 2010, 3:38 pm

Thank you Ryan. Yes, there is a girl, but it's not so much a romantic relationship as it is a very close friendship.
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Post by maybegenius » March 16th, 2010, 6:43 pm

This is a quirky and adorable piece! I'm loving the subtle humor :)
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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by Ryan » March 17th, 2010, 2:04 am

Ahhhh! I like it. Cedric learns to be a dragon from the beings he's supposed to burn, eat and destroy. From the little I've read, I can picture Cedric the Dorky Dragon perfectly.

This could be an easy read series that never really comes to an end:

Cedric the Dorky Dragon Looks for Treasure

Cedric the Dorky Dragon Finally Learns to Fly

Cedric the Dorky Dragon Saves Christmas

Cedric the Dorky Dragon Goes to Outer Space

Cedric the Dorky Dragon Gets Published
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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by ganstream1 » March 17th, 2010, 6:03 am

The story is great, really like the way you tell the story and the subtle humor. It really flows to me.

and I lolled at the easy read series, great thinking :D
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Re: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)

Post by ljkuhnley » March 18th, 2010, 3:46 pm

Thanks everyone!

I'm actually writing Cedric as a stand-alone middle-grade novel. But if that doesn't work out I could see adapting it to a chapter book series. Great idea, Ryan.

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