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Post by PolarisStarr » February 13th, 2010, 11:54 am

I’m in the backyard sitting cross-legged inside a 2x2x8 wooden box made of plywood filled with earthworms.

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Post by RacerCastle » February 13th, 2010, 11:59 am

ONCE UPON A TIME beyond a certain dark pine forest in a distant land, beyond thrice nine mountains, beyond thrice seventh tundras into the fifty-seventh kingdom, there was a world with caves, rivers, mountains, creatures and a castle.

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Post by austingirl » February 13th, 2010, 12:10 pm

Once upon a time, over the ninth land, beyond thrice kingdom, there existed a planet called Planet Palms.

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Post by PoppysInARow » February 13th, 2010, 12:26 pm

Mine would be:

Jonah would never forget the day he died.
Insert Witty Signature Here.

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Post by Mary » February 13th, 2010, 12:55 pm

Josin wrote:We're all immortal until we die.
Impressive opening - 10.

Here's one of mine...

My heart clenched at the sight of the folded white slip of paper barely noticeable in the vent of my locker.

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Post by christi » February 13th, 2010, 1:02 pm

Okay, I can't choose. They're all pretty good. Here's mine:

"My life did not begin until I had experienced death."
Would you sign my story for a Klondike bar?

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Post by JustineDell » February 13th, 2010, 1:08 pm

christi wrote:Okay, I can't choose. They're all pretty good. Here's mine:

"My life did not begin until I had experienced death."
I like it. I give a 10!!!!!!!

Here's mine from my finished ms:

Damn, I wish he would look at me before I leave today, Jaimie fumed silently.

From my current WIP:

"Are you out of your mind Dr. Wade?"

http://www.justine-dell.blogspot.com/

"Three things in life that, once gone, never return; Time, Words, & Opportunity"

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Post by maybegenius » February 13th, 2010, 1:22 pm

marilyn peake wrote:maybegenius - I love your sentence! I give it a 9.
NHWriter wrote:
maybegenius wrote:
Josin wrote:We're all immortal until we die.
Sometimes the world is so cold my voice freezes in the air and shatters.
This is my favorite so far as well.
cassandrabonmot wrote:Maybegenius,

Love it. 9 or 10!! I def keep reading. Good job!
Thank you all! *blush*

Lots of good hooks here! Keep them coming :)
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Post by beacon22 » February 13th, 2010, 4:56 pm

This is a such a fun topic! Here is mine from my YA novel out on submission right now:

Your dad will leave you when you are twelve.
Come on over to my blog and lurk a little!

http://www.freckle-head.blogspot.com

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Post by wetair » February 13th, 2010, 6:16 pm

Mine is pretty boring compared to those. :(

The cold wind blew the exhaust of a passing bus into my face and I coughed into my hand.

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Post by abc » February 13th, 2010, 8:45 pm

Until puberty hit life was pretty great, but then I turned twelve and terrible things started to happen.

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Post by Serzen » February 14th, 2010, 12:59 am

A short story I began tonight:

I found the revolver in a plain brown box.

There are some gems above. I enjoy non sequiturs, even if, being opening lines, these don't follow anything.

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Il en est des livres comme du feu de nos foyers; on va prendre ce feu chez son voisin, on l’allume chez soi, on le communique à d’autres, et il appartient à tous. --Voltaire

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Post by EvelynEhrlich » February 14th, 2010, 1:05 am

abc - I really like your opening sentence. Seems like it would be very appealing to a curious MG reader.

Here's mine (contemporary YA):
Ten months ago, I was nobody – no one took me on fancy dates or paid special attention to me, but no one wanted to kill me, either.

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Post by charlotte49ers » February 14th, 2010, 2:58 am

Ooo!! Very intriguing! I like it!

Mine (YA w/ a female MC):

I had a hairy upper lip.

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Post by abc » February 14th, 2010, 6:25 pm

EvelynEhrlich--thanks!

I'm smitten with many of these juicy sentences!

I had a hairy upper lip? awesome.

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