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Chimera
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Re: Share your opening sentence!

Post by Chimera » February 18th, 2010, 1:50 pm

From a short story I'm working on:

Unfolding today, folding tomorrow.

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Re: Share your opening sentence!

Post by CharleeVale » February 19th, 2010, 1:48 am

Emily White wrote:Ooh! Nice! I like the second one especially, Charlee!

Here's mine:

Nathadria, the girl everyone had forgotten, decided to leave Hell.
Thank you!

Yours had me wanting to read more instantly by the way.

CV

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Re: Share your opening sentence!

Post by GabbyP » February 19th, 2010, 11:19 am

From my romance/mystery entitled: Annabel Pitkeathely: Food Detective

Wolf never called on Sundays.

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Post by Crystal » February 19th, 2010, 12:22 pm

wow so many of you have such good opening lines. Mine seems a bit boring now. :)

Gabby, I like yours. So short yet so intriguing. I give it a 9

The snow covered streets are practically deserted.

From my slow going wip, a mystery.
Working my very first attempt at a mystery novel. 1st draft

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Post by Vegas Linda Lou » February 19th, 2010, 3:01 pm

"Today I put my bastard husband on a plane to the other side of the world."

From Bastard Husband: A Love Story
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Post by the_anomaly » February 19th, 2010, 6:28 pm

Opening lines are the hardest to come up with! I've tried being unusual, throwing something out there to catch the reader's eye, but for me, the opening line always wants to end up being something simple and straightforward. Anyway, here's mine:

"The sky is blue," he gasped.

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Post by Sandy Shin » February 19th, 2010, 11:34 pm

Vegas Linda Lou: Love your opening sentence! :>

I'm still writing the first draft, so this will likely change, but here it is, the first sentence:

"Yuki learned of her matchmaking ability the day her mom left with a man connected to her by a red thread."

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Post by GeeGee55 » February 20th, 2010, 12:57 am

Hillsy and Shandy Shin you've got something special. Here's mine and I don't really like it myself:

The Kelman baby died early in the strange, hot spring of 1938.

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Post by lmitchell » February 20th, 2010, 1:15 am

cassandrabonmot wrote:1973. The year of disco: Afro wigs, platform heels and strobe lights.

This is my opening sentence for my romantic comedy novel called 'Jackpot.'
Love it. Your opener set the mood instantly.


Here is mine:

"I was convinced it was a standoff with the devil himself, only this fiend was clad in a corset and powder-blue gingham."

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Post by ivanpope » February 21st, 2010, 10:51 am

It is my job to remember.

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Post by CharleeVale » February 21st, 2010, 2:25 pm

I just came up with one for a story idea that I am currently toying with.

I now know that the day I dyed my hair changed my life.

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Post by Merisi » February 21st, 2010, 3:00 pm

Love what I've read thus far! Here's mine...

"I can only stare at Pan’s cigarette, inexplicably dangling from his thin bottom lip, as I wait for his arms to explode away from his body."

From my urban fiction novel, "Empire Of Light". By the way, this is my first post here. This looks like a great site, full of some very talented writers. Hope to get to know you folks more.

G.

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Post by Merisi » February 21st, 2010, 3:08 pm

miahayson wrote: "A death in the family is always difficult to cope with, especially when it’s your own."
This is very clever. Hope to read this one someday.

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Post by dementedtinkerbell » February 21st, 2010, 3:11 pm

Merisi wrote:Love what I've read thus far! Here's mine...

"I can only stare at Pan’s cigarette, inexplicably dangling from his thin bottom lip, as I wait for his arms to explode away from his body."

From my urban fiction novel, "Empire Of Light". By the way, this is my first post here. This looks like a great site, full of some very talented writers. Hope to get to know you folks more.

G.
I like that one :D

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Me to my girl: You're grounded until you're dead
Her: You mean 'til you're dead right?
Me: No, I'll enforce it from beyond the grave
Her: *gulp*

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Re: Share your opening sentence!

Post by charlotte49ers » February 21st, 2010, 3:48 pm

Yes, welcome, Merisi!

I started playing around with an MG novel.

"Principals aren’t supposed be happy when a student pulls the fire alarm."

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