Exerpt scene from IRREFUTABLE.
Posted: December 8th, 2010, 3:39 pm
Sample scene from new WIP. I'm going for just a touch of suspense. I want to know if you, as a reader would be interested enough to read on.
It appeared on the right. High up on the wall near the ceiling and moved slowly to the left, toward the corner, then across the wall in front of her. It was shaped like the arched window above the front door. Carmen was used to the moving lights made by the sun reflecting off the windows of passing cars, she usually didn’t notice them, but this one caught her attention. It moved much slower than usual. She looked up from her book and watched it until it disappeared, just before reaching the corner on the left side of the room. She watched the wall for a few moments, then, her attention returned to her book.
Her American History final was tomorrow and she had a bad habit of waiting until the last possible minute to cram the night before an exam. After a few paragraphs, the light returned, this time on the left, the same spot from where it disappeared earlier. Carmen looked up from her book again. The light moved slowly to the right and stopped, just short of the corner. She watched for a few moments, waiting for it to move on. It didn’t. She stood from the couch and walked to the window. Using her fingers, she parted the drape just enough to see. The car was stopped directly in front of the house. She didn’t recognize it. She tried to see the driver but sun reflecting off the tinted windows made it impossible
It appeared on the right. High up on the wall near the ceiling and moved slowly to the left, toward the corner, then across the wall in front of her. It was shaped like the arched window above the front door. Carmen was used to the moving lights made by the sun reflecting off the windows of passing cars, she usually didn’t notice them, but this one caught her attention. It moved much slower than usual. She looked up from her book and watched it until it disappeared, just before reaching the corner on the left side of the room. She watched the wall for a few moments, then, her attention returned to her book.
Her American History final was tomorrow and she had a bad habit of waiting until the last possible minute to cram the night before an exam. After a few paragraphs, the light returned, this time on the left, the same spot from where it disappeared earlier. Carmen looked up from her book again. The light moved slowly to the right and stopped, just short of the corner. She watched for a few moments, waiting for it to move on. It didn’t. She stood from the couch and walked to the window. Using her fingers, she parted the drape just enough to see. The car was stopped directly in front of the house. She didn’t recognize it. She tried to see the driver but sun reflecting off the tinted windows made it impossible