Wolf-Killer opening YA, Gothic Fantasy
Wolf-Killer opening YA, Gothic Fantasy
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Last edited by Josin on January 27th, 2011, 11:14 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Wolf-Killer opening YA, Gothic Fantasy
Yeah, I was going to comment on this before and it disappeared. Just as a quick observation, I have to say this version reads much clearer. I do like the third person voice for this.
If you want more in-depth critique/line-edit type critique leave it up and people will get to it when they have time.
If you want more in-depth critique/line-edit type critique leave it up and people will get to it when they have time.
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