Wolf-Killer opening YA, Gothic Fantasy

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Josin
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Wolf-Killer opening YA, Gothic Fantasy

Post by Josin » December 2nd, 2010, 1:59 pm

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Re: Wolf-Killer opening YA, Gothic Fantasy

Post by Down the well » December 2nd, 2010, 2:25 pm

Yeah, I was going to comment on this before and it disappeared. Just as a quick observation, I have to say this version reads much clearer. I do like the third person voice for this.

If you want more in-depth critique/line-edit type critique leave it up and people will get to it when they have time.

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