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JJL
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Post by JJL » July 20th, 2020, 2:38 pm

Chapter One
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Re: Inside The Eyes of Providence Chapter One (not sure of correct genre listing for this) Critiques welcome

Post by DrifterNZ » November 18th, 2020, 3:54 am

Okay I admit this isn't really my cup of tea, but I tried to read it.
However I got lost with the sudden change from the sniper rifle firing to fishing. I could not make the connection between the two events. It is like reading one book and suddenly switching to another without any reason to.

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Re: Inside

Post by Nanisa » February 13th, 2023, 1:38 am

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