Query: THE CHANGELING, MG Fantasy
Posted: February 19th, 2010, 2:15 pm
Hey there! I'm brand new to this forum. I've sent this query to a few agents and gotten no response whatsoever, so I'd love input! I'll be glad to give my two-cents once I have some idea what I'm talking about.
I tried to make this teaser-ish, but my hunch is that it's too short. What do you think?
Thank you guys! Here's the new version. I hope the "tease" isn't lost. :)
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I’ve recently completed my first novel. Your agency has a wonderful reputation and client list, and I would be honored if you’d consider adding me to your roster.
Tom O’Malley just has to get through the next week. It’s horrible enough that he’s starting a new prep school tomorrow, but his parents have skipped town for yet another business trip and his annoying older sister is playing babysitter. So when he’s cornered by a legion of goblins offering to swap him with a changeling for the week, he jumps at the opportunity.
Bad idea. The more time Tom spends in the putrid Bog Kingdom, or out on human baiting “frights” with the power-mad Boggobs, the more he realizes his mistake. The sinister Captain of the Bog Goblins plucked Tom from the human world for a reason - and he doesn’t intend to send him back. Not as a human, anyway.
Rescues arrive in the form of a snooty ballerina, a bookish goblin page, a squadron of outpost elves, and a swarm of precognitive flies. But in order for Tom to get home in time to save his sister from the changeling, he’ll have to set out on his own to learn the truth – about the surprising origins of this world, the endless wall that separates it from his own, and his newfound ability, the dangerous power that first set the goblins on his trail.
THE CHANGELING is a 73,000 word middle-grade fantasy-adventure, the first in a proposed series. I’m a graduate of NYU’s Tisch School of the Arts and the creator of the **** web series.
Thank you very much for your time, and I look forward to hearing from you!
I tried to make this teaser-ish, but my hunch is that it's too short. What do you think?
Thank you guys! Here's the new version. I hope the "tease" isn't lost. :)
______________________________________
I’ve recently completed my first novel. Your agency has a wonderful reputation and client list, and I would be honored if you’d consider adding me to your roster.
Tom O’Malley just has to get through the next week. It’s horrible enough that he’s starting a new prep school tomorrow, but his parents have skipped town for yet another business trip and his annoying older sister is playing babysitter. So when he’s cornered by a legion of goblins offering to swap him with a changeling for the week, he jumps at the opportunity.
Bad idea. The more time Tom spends in the putrid Bog Kingdom, or out on human baiting “frights” with the power-mad Boggobs, the more he realizes his mistake. The sinister Captain of the Bog Goblins plucked Tom from the human world for a reason - and he doesn’t intend to send him back. Not as a human, anyway.
Rescues arrive in the form of a snooty ballerina, a bookish goblin page, a squadron of outpost elves, and a swarm of precognitive flies. But in order for Tom to get home in time to save his sister from the changeling, he’ll have to set out on his own to learn the truth – about the surprising origins of this world, the endless wall that separates it from his own, and his newfound ability, the dangerous power that first set the goblins on his trail.
THE CHANGELING is a 73,000 word middle-grade fantasy-adventure, the first in a proposed series. I’m a graduate of NYU’s Tisch School of the Arts and the creator of the **** web series.
Thank you very much for your time, and I look forward to hearing from you!