My Query for The Elements (Book I)

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My Query for The Elements (Book I)

Post by tkmceachin » February 11th, 2013, 3:05 pm

Dear Agent
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Re: My Query for The Elements (Book I)

Post by boatbuilder » February 13th, 2013, 12:42 pm

Great concept but the query is somewhat wordy . Try to streamline it to around 250 words. It is also confusing because you have too many names in the text.

Using double spaces between your paragraphs will make it a little easier to read

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Re: My Query for The Elements (Book I)

Post by tkmceachin » February 13th, 2013, 1:12 pm

boatbuilder wrote:Great concept but the query is somewhat wordy . Try to streamline it to around 250 words. It is also confusing because you have too many names in the text.

Using double spaces between your paragraphs will make it a little easier to read
Thanks so much. I think you're right. I do need to space it but didn't because I was trying to fit it all on one page, of course lol. I'm going to start over I think instead of just editing this one. I appreciate your feedback! :)

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Re: My Query for The Elements (Book I)

Post by tkmceachin » February 21st, 2013, 8:59 pm

I'm going to revise it & not include some names & report!

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