Second redo for Meg O'Brien Wears A Thong
Posted: May 14th, 2010, 10:44 am
This is my second time to post my query for feedback. This one is much better than my last, but must need polishing since I have not had any takers from my submissions. I'm looking for kind, constructive critisism - Thanks -Chris48
As a Massage Therapist, Meg O’Brien is in the business of making people feel good. So why did someone rig her staircase, hoping she would plunge to her death? This, and more menacing incidents, leaves Meg as nervous as a bagpiper in a windstorm.
Meg wonders if it has something to do with helping her friend, Adrianna return her stolen embryos. Is there a connection with the mysterious bald electrician who has been spotted at the scene of the crimes? Or maybe it has nothing to do with her latest good deed. Perhaps the lovesick, toupee-wearing Chiropractor is to blame?
True to form for Meg, this is not the only turmoil in her life. Lately, she has been questioning if her fiancé, Glen is the right man for her. Sure, he might be dependable and steady, but he doesn’t understand Meg, and is regrettably, as boring as dirt. Her parents have happily handed off the baton of responsibility to Glen. But, now Meg wants to hold that baton herself, and feels a secret desire to beat Glen over the head with it.
To complicate matters, Meg suspects that her sexy friend Alex has been popping Viagra like candy. Why else would his normally innocuous flirtations turn hotter than a Tom Jones concert?
Meg must now decide who the greater danger is, the mystery man who is trying to kill her, or Alex with the killer bod.
MEG O’BRIEN WEARS A THONG is a 102,000 word work of Chick Lit, similar to novels by Meg Cabot and Janet Evanovich, with a sprinkling of Dave Barry.
Thank you for taking the time to consider my submission.
As a Massage Therapist, Meg O’Brien is in the business of making people feel good. So why did someone rig her staircase, hoping she would plunge to her death? This, and more menacing incidents, leaves Meg as nervous as a bagpiper in a windstorm.
Meg wonders if it has something to do with helping her friend, Adrianna return her stolen embryos. Is there a connection with the mysterious bald electrician who has been spotted at the scene of the crimes? Or maybe it has nothing to do with her latest good deed. Perhaps the lovesick, toupee-wearing Chiropractor is to blame?
True to form for Meg, this is not the only turmoil in her life. Lately, she has been questioning if her fiancé, Glen is the right man for her. Sure, he might be dependable and steady, but he doesn’t understand Meg, and is regrettably, as boring as dirt. Her parents have happily handed off the baton of responsibility to Glen. But, now Meg wants to hold that baton herself, and feels a secret desire to beat Glen over the head with it.
To complicate matters, Meg suspects that her sexy friend Alex has been popping Viagra like candy. Why else would his normally innocuous flirtations turn hotter than a Tom Jones concert?
Meg must now decide who the greater danger is, the mystery man who is trying to kill her, or Alex with the killer bod.
MEG O’BRIEN WEARS A THONG is a 102,000 word work of Chick Lit, similar to novels by Meg Cabot and Janet Evanovich, with a sprinkling of Dave Barry.
Thank you for taking the time to consider my submission.