Query Help Needed: ZOMBIE RABBIT
Posted: March 29th, 2010, 11:42 pm
I'm a children's writer trying to perfect my query letter for my Middle Grade novel: ZOMBIE RABBIT. I need a Simon Cowell worthy critique for my query. Thanks in advance for any feedback.
Dear Agent:
I am searching for an agent to represent my 30,000 word, Middle-Grade novel, ZOMBIE RABBIT. Your website lists a remarkable group of authors and illustrators as your clients. I would be honored if you would consider me. The following is a synopsis of my story.
Milo Thimbleberry is a rabbit bumbling down the road of life; when he’s killed by a truck. Much to his annoyance, fate gives him a second chance as one of the undead.
Life as a zombie stinks in more ways than one. Milo’s naps keep getting interrupted; he’s being stalked by maggots, burying beetles, and carrion scavengers; and his parents have booted him out of the burrow. Milo just needs to move on already.
He’s chagrined to find that to move on, he has to lead an Odyssean quest to rescue a rabbit from an animal testing lab. Not only does this sound like a lot of hard work, but it sounds dangerous as heck. Once he finally realizes that “he can’t get any deader”, he decides to take on the challenge.
Milo’s resolve strengthens with every trial the zombies overcome. By the time they reach the GOOP Lab, Milo has become a fierce leader who’s loved and respected by his followers. He goes above and beyond what’s expected of him and gets the chance to move on at last.
While the story is much closer to Oh Brother Where Art Thou, than Ulysses, Milo does make an amazing transformation over the course of the story. It has enough gross out humor to titillate any boy, but also a hero’s quest and a few damsels in distress to appeal to girls.
I am an active member of my local SCBWI.
Thank you for taking the time to consider my query.
Dear Agent:
I am searching for an agent to represent my 30,000 word, Middle-Grade novel, ZOMBIE RABBIT. Your website lists a remarkable group of authors and illustrators as your clients. I would be honored if you would consider me. The following is a synopsis of my story.
Milo Thimbleberry is a rabbit bumbling down the road of life; when he’s killed by a truck. Much to his annoyance, fate gives him a second chance as one of the undead.
Life as a zombie stinks in more ways than one. Milo’s naps keep getting interrupted; he’s being stalked by maggots, burying beetles, and carrion scavengers; and his parents have booted him out of the burrow. Milo just needs to move on already.
He’s chagrined to find that to move on, he has to lead an Odyssean quest to rescue a rabbit from an animal testing lab. Not only does this sound like a lot of hard work, but it sounds dangerous as heck. Once he finally realizes that “he can’t get any deader”, he decides to take on the challenge.
Milo’s resolve strengthens with every trial the zombies overcome. By the time they reach the GOOP Lab, Milo has become a fierce leader who’s loved and respected by his followers. He goes above and beyond what’s expected of him and gets the chance to move on at last.
While the story is much closer to Oh Brother Where Art Thou, than Ulysses, Milo does make an amazing transformation over the course of the story. It has enough gross out humor to titillate any boy, but also a hero’s quest and a few damsels in distress to appeal to girls.
I am an active member of my local SCBWI.
Thank you for taking the time to consider my query.