YA Novel - Analyzing Liza
Posted: May 13th, 2014, 4:46 pm
Hi! I've sent this query about 20 times but didn't have a bite yet.
I'm not sure if it is because the query is not well written or if the story doesn't seem good enough... I've rewritten it so many times I can't really tell if it's good or not anymore. Can you help? I would love to hear your comments! Thank you so much!
(itaics) I don’t believe in unicorns, but if someone told me there was one right behind me, I would sure as hell turn around. Even if just to tell them afterwards “That’s a cow, you idiot.” Liza McCarthy
Liza McCarthy never imagined she’d get any more excitement out of a doctor’s office than thumbing through tattered old gossip magazines. But when a god-like creature (and by that, I mean really freaking hot!) suddenly "materializes" in the room, it’s hard for Liza to keep her heart from skipping a beat, let alone her jaw from cracking the marble floor.
Completely entranced and slightly obsessed, she hastily schedules an appointment with the alluring 40 year old. She steps into his office break dancing on cloud nine, only to trip and fall flat on her ass when she sets her gaze upon a white version of Al Roker. Realizing she’s booked the wrong psychiatrist, she tries to save face by faking a phobia on the spot and ends up getting stuck with the overly caring doctor, while also starting therapy with the godly Dr. Fife.
With the wildly misguided help of her outlandish group of friends, Liza will attempt the mother of all juggling acts (bear in mind, she is a very uncoordinated girl): two shrinks, a bogus fear and the "accidental" stalking of the man of her dreams.
ANALYZING LIZA is an irreverent and fresh Young Adult novel about lying your way through therapy - which you didn’t even need in the first place - and discovering that reality is sometimes far wilder than your wildest dreams.
I am 29 year old advertising copywriter by day, an aspiring author by night and a radio comedy writer in my spare time. “Analyzing Liza” is my first novel. It is complete at 45,000 words.
I'm not sure if it is because the query is not well written or if the story doesn't seem good enough... I've rewritten it so many times I can't really tell if it's good or not anymore. Can you help? I would love to hear your comments! Thank you so much!
(itaics) I don’t believe in unicorns, but if someone told me there was one right behind me, I would sure as hell turn around. Even if just to tell them afterwards “That’s a cow, you idiot.” Liza McCarthy
Liza McCarthy never imagined she’d get any more excitement out of a doctor’s office than thumbing through tattered old gossip magazines. But when a god-like creature (and by that, I mean really freaking hot!) suddenly "materializes" in the room, it’s hard for Liza to keep her heart from skipping a beat, let alone her jaw from cracking the marble floor.
Completely entranced and slightly obsessed, she hastily schedules an appointment with the alluring 40 year old. She steps into his office break dancing on cloud nine, only to trip and fall flat on her ass when she sets her gaze upon a white version of Al Roker. Realizing she’s booked the wrong psychiatrist, she tries to save face by faking a phobia on the spot and ends up getting stuck with the overly caring doctor, while also starting therapy with the godly Dr. Fife.
With the wildly misguided help of her outlandish group of friends, Liza will attempt the mother of all juggling acts (bear in mind, she is a very uncoordinated girl): two shrinks, a bogus fear and the "accidental" stalking of the man of her dreams.
ANALYZING LIZA is an irreverent and fresh Young Adult novel about lying your way through therapy - which you didn’t even need in the first place - and discovering that reality is sometimes far wilder than your wildest dreams.
I am 29 year old advertising copywriter by day, an aspiring author by night and a radio comedy writer in my spare time. “Analyzing Liza” is my first novel. It is complete at 45,000 words.