Query - The Power Vested Within

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Query - The Power Vested Within

Post by ttougaw » December 4th, 2017, 5:00 pm

Hello Everyone

I'm very new to this forum and writing in general; this is my first novel. I've been scouring posts in this thread and I'm hoping I can contribute to refining queries in the future. At the moment, I don't feel knowledgeable enough to fully contribute, so I'm hoping a little critique on my query may help me be more useful. So here goes!

[Dear agent]

Jace Verro is a fiercely independent criminal with no family and no friends, and does his best to stay out of other people’s lives. It is unclear how or why Jace will become a hero, but after a tragic terrorist attack kills hundreds of people, he is suddenly pursued by highly trained assassins. He doesn’t know who they are or how they found him, but he does know that they are after a secret he's kept hidden his entire life. After being alone for his whole life, he now knows that he's going to need help if he's going to survive. The problem is, getting that help requires him to open up to others. If he does that, the secret he holds will not be a secret anymore, and the power that he wields might end up causing more damage than it prevents.

Leona Fairchild, daughter of the President of the United States, is brilliant and holds a place of prominence in the White House. After a terrorist attack kills hundreds of people, her seemingly perfect life is upended, and she is thrust into the shadowy underworld that is the life of Jace Verro. As Jace opens up to her, their lives intertwine, and he is thrust into the glitz and glamor of presidential life.

The two of them must figure out who is following Jace before he – or Leona – gets killed. In the process, both of them must make personal sacrifices that may end up teaching them about what it truly means to love someone. Together, they will travel down a path of no return, uncovering information that even her father doesn’t know about. The revelations that these two uncover will shake the American government to its core.

The Power Vested Within is a political and supernatural thriller, in the style of Firestarter by Stephen King, and is completed at 92,000 words.

I have just completed two undergraduate degrees and finished work as an editor for the Rocky Mountain Collegian newspaper. I have written numerous columns for this publication for online media as well as print. I’m passionate about writing and hope to continue that passion with this novel.

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