Query Fantasy: The Son of Ashes

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Query Fantasy: The Son of Ashes

Post by v2acnam » February 9th, 2021, 6:51 pm

Hey everyone! I recently just did a massive revision of my query. Let me know what you all think! I also had a short author bio right before the closing line but chose to omit it for this post.

Dear Agent,

I am writing to seek representation for my debut fantasy novel, The Son of Ashes Volume 1: The False King, a complete 104K word Adult Fantasy novel. After doing research, I learned that -insert why I chose the agent-. With that, I believe we would be a good match.

Leon Melstorm, a shut-in and isolated prince, is marked as the realm’s last hope between stability and total chaos.

Leon has lived nearly his entire life locked in the royal palace, often wishing for a chance to adventure and live the exciting life he always dreamed of. But when the figures of the Aithonian throne are unexpectedly massacred and with no one else to turn to, Leon is suddenly piled with the immense responsibility to save the realm that he hardly knows. Seen as incapable, spoiled, and ignorant, he struggles through challenges and tragedies as he tries to prove his worth to himself and to the people that did not know he even existed. The adventure that Leon had wished for will transform him into a hero that will bring stability – or into a villain that brings the chaos he was fighting to prevent.

The Son of Ashes is written as the first volume of a planned series. It has the ability to appeal to fans of George RR Martin’s Game of Thrones, Rick Riordon’s Percy Jackson & The Olympians, fans of The Witcher, and fans of Vikings and The Last Kingdom.

Thank you so much for your time and consideration, I look forward to hearing from you.

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