Nathan Bransford - The Forums

This is much better! For someone who doesn't often read sci-fi, I actually understood this time what was going on, and I felt much more a part of the world instead of apart from the world :) Here is my suggestion for the first line, although I'm not so in love with it either! Seth had always appreci...

This is much better and easier to understand! There's a few things I would change, but that's just me. This opening, however, is a LOT more intriguing than the first. I am wondering what else will enfold in this world. I am not so concerned about what these gadgets are, but what more will appear and...

Hello! I am looking for an active critique partner for a YA romance/supernatural WIP. Since it's a WIP, I'm looking for someone who will remain engaged for more than just a one time read-through :) I really would like someone who is thorough and heavy-handed when necessary; I learn from my mistakes,...

Hello :) This is my first time doing this, and I noticed that no one had given you any feedback yet. Here are my thoughts: “Seth Tucker to the principal’s office. Seth Tucker to the principal’s office.” Seth winced at the intercom’s parting bleep, which was loud enough to drown out his homework. I'm...

Title: Glory or Death Genre: YA Fantasy Word count: 250 Ayla Elias was fifteen years, three hundred sixty four days, and twenty two hours old… and running late for her birthday dinner date with her dad. She ran along the dirt path with bare feet, a frown, and a basket of fruit over her shoulder. Twi...