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- July 19th, 2010, 12:52 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: TOUR BUS TO MEXICO, 1982 - short story excerpt
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3302
Re: TOUR BUS TO MEXICO, 1982 - short story excerpt
Aw, GeeGee55, your comment on WilliamMJones' thread about your excerpt being ignored made me sad. I think it would help if you hit "return" after each paragraph, so that the post doesn't look like a gigantic, daunting block of text. Then maybe more people would comment? I did that below, a...
- July 19th, 2010, 12:03 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: SCBWI in LA?
- Replies: 1
- Views: 947
SCBWI in LA?
Anyone going to the SCBWI conference in LA and want to meet up? From the other thread on conferences, looks like maybegenius, SusanQuinn and I will be there.
- July 19th, 2010, 12:02 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Writer Conferences
- Replies: 49
- Views: 15763
Re: Writer Conferences
Susan,
maybegenius and I will be there. I'm going to start a new thread about the conference in case anyone else is going but hasn't checked this one. I didn't get into the YA voice workshop, boo.
maybegenius and I will be there. I'm going to start a new thread about the conference in case anyone else is going but hasn't checked this one. I didn't get into the YA voice workshop, boo.
- July 18th, 2010, 4:21 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Prologue to TIMELESS (YA Paranormal Romance)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3821
Re: Prologue to TIMELESS (YA Paranormal Romance)
Hi Greg, Thanks very much for the suggestions. It's great to get feedback from someone who reads a lot of historical fiction. Leo actually isn't the Crown Prince (son of the Tsar), but rather, a nobleman with the hereditary title of "Prince" (his grandfather was awarded the Order of St. Ge...
- July 16th, 2010, 6:49 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Whip-Slip query
- Replies: 68
- Views: 20237
Re: The Whip-Slip query
thewhipslip,
You are definitely on the right track. This query resonated with me so much more. The MC and plot come through, and you still have voice. I agree with wilderness's comments. Good luck as you fine-tune.
You are definitely on the right track. This query resonated with me so much more. The MC and plot come through, and you still have voice. I agree with wilderness's comments. Good luck as you fine-tune.
- July 16th, 2010, 4:30 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: SYTYCD
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1802
Re: SYTYCD
I think you're right. Kent and Lauren as the final two.
- July 15th, 2010, 10:41 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4337
Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
Hey BethC, I wouldn't mention the lost prophecy if it's not solved in the book. I think most agents want to see you pitching only one book, so even if they end up falling in love with it and trying to sell it as a series, best to keep that second manuscript (and the unsolved lost prophecy) in your b...
- July 15th, 2010, 5:48 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4337
Re: NEW for I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY
BethC, I think this is smooth and easy to read, and the story is great. You managed to capture voice in the synopsis, and you also made me care about Presley and Reid. That's hard to do in a synopsis, so you deserve kudos for that. I don't think you need to mention Jack, though. When I started readi...
- July 15th, 2010, 4:59 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Whip-Slip query
- Replies: 68
- Views: 20237
Re: The Whip-Slip query
Good voice and premise, but I have to admit that you lost me on the query. I think it needs to be tightened up, and, as the other commenters noted, you can cut back on the jokes. They feel like an outside narrator interrupting the story with his own commentary and a completely different voice. Some ...
- July 15th, 2010, 4:20 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Prologue to TIMELESS (YA Paranormal Romance)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3821
Re: Prologue to TIMELESS (YA Paranormal Romance)
Didn't mean to ignore the others who have commented on my prologue. Thanks to everyone for the thoughtful and constructive advice!
- July 15th, 2010, 4:20 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
- Replies: 22
- Views: 10258
Re: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
Thanks for the kind words, BethC. To answer your question, the part about Lena's death being Leo's fault is a smaller part of the story, so I left the backstory out of the synopsis. It's part of him and Helene figuring out how she got from 19th C Russia to 21st C America. I see what your saying, tho...
- July 15th, 2010, 1:11 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: BLOOD WILL TELL, Urban Fantasy, Revised
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3815
Re: BLOOD WILL TELL, Urban Fantasy
Glad you weren't too heartbroken over changing Cullen's name. You've probably figured it out by now, but "Cullen" is Edward (the star vampire)'s last name. The Twilight craze shot the name Cullen to the top of the Baby Boy name list this year.
- July 15th, 2010, 1:08 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Prologue to TIMELESS (YA Paranormal Romance)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3821
Re: Prologue to TIMELESS (YA Paranormal Romance)
Thanks, Meredith! Great suggestions that will go into my revised prologue.
- July 14th, 2010, 11:01 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: BLOOD WILL TELL, Urban Fantasy, Revised
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3815
Re: BLOOD WILL TELL, Urban Fantasy
Hi Meredith, Overall, this is pretty smooth, with a good mix of action and detail to make us feel sympathetic toward MC from the get-go. A few comments below, hope it helps. I've just been through a revision, mostly of the first chapters of this. Here's the first page and a half, or so: Chapter 1: A...
- July 14th, 2010, 10:35 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Whom do you write like?
- Replies: 53
- Views: 22782
Re: Whom do you write like?
This is fun! My WIP has two POV characters: Leo, a 19th century prince, and Helene, a 21st girl (both are teens). I plugged in Leo's first chapter, and IWL said I write like Dan Brown. Then I plugged in Helene's first chapter, and I got Stephenie Meyer. I know a lot of you don't think Dan Brown and ...