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- December 19th, 2009, 10:09 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Two queries for Epertase- Which to use?
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5549
Re: Two queries for Epertase- Which to use?
This story sounds AMAZING. I like the first version best too. The only suggestion I might make (and others might disagree, but i thought I'd throw it out there)--the detailing is VERY dense and adds to what the story is, but dense details, complex sentence structure and long paragraph combined to m...
- December 19th, 2009, 9:59 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query help - Gothic - REVISED
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8551
Re: Query help - Gothic
I would like to add that I respectfully disagree with the above poster that your story may be flawed. It may be, for all I know, but I don't think that can be told from just a query. Maybe the query just doesn't explain everything well enough to tell us all we want to know. Good luck. I like your p...
- December 17th, 2009, 5:56 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: the secret to writing a query
- Replies: 13
- Views: 7473
Re: the secret to writing a query
I've heard rules like: the first name in the query should be the main character. Or to use third person present tense regardless of how your manuscript is written. There are others that I can't think of right off the bat. My first query started with "King Elijah would kill his own daughter to s...
- December 17th, 2009, 4:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query help - Gothic - REVISED
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8551
Re: Query help - Gothic
Here's my query. I'm looking for any suggestions you can provide. Thanks JQ - - Hell has come to Gothic. On a job to secure his freedom, a self-condemning bounty hunter tracks a member of his former gang to Gothic, a Rocky Mountain coal-mining town. The bounty hunter traded his death sentence for a...
- December 17th, 2009, 1:46 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Two queries for Epertase- Which to use?
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5549
Re: Two queries for Epertase- Which to use?
Thank you to everyone for your advice. I'm going with the first query with a few minor tweaks to reflect your responses. I am sending out my first batch from this query today. I will keep everyone informed if I get any requests. To date, I have not gotten even a partial request with my last two quer...
- December 16th, 2009, 9:37 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Two queries for Epertase- Which to use?
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5549
Two queries for Epertase- Which to use?
I was about to start querying with the letter that everyone her helped me with when a couple small details kept rubbing me wrong. I tried to fix them but was afraid I might have ruined my query by making more questions than answers. So what better way to decide than getting all of your brilliant adv...
- December 14th, 2009, 5:01 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Even Trees
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4180
Re: Even Trees
Very nice job. Tell me where to buy this because I'd read it. No specific comments about the query as I am an amatuer but I did like it. Good luck and keep us informed on your progress.
- December 13th, 2009, 1:05 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Your own website?
- Replies: 27
- Views: 12579
Re: Your own website?
I started my own blog site basically to have an avenue to practice my writing and get critiques. Though I used my epertase name for it, the site is mostly whatever I choose to write about at any given time. I include a link with my email address on my queries just in case an agent wants to sample my...
- December 13th, 2009, 12:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Review and some helpful hints
- Replies: 11
- Views: 6914
Re: Query Review and some helpful hints
Great advice. I kick myself for wasting my chance with my top agents with my terrible early queries.
- December 11th, 2009, 5:23 pm
- Forum: Ask Nathan
- Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
- Replies: 793
- Views: 409059
Re: Ask Nathan
Maybe a silly question. In a query, is it worth taking small risks? I'll use an example to show what I mean. Let's say an agent once replied to someone on her blog, "Oh Gawd, don't call me Ms. Your Highness of Empress would be fine," but it was a couple years ago. If someone sent a query b...
- December 11th, 2009, 10:07 am
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Querying Agents
- Replies: 11
- Views: 5445
Re: Querying Agents
Also, I realize the perfect agent for me may not be someone I originally think is a "top pick" and vice versa - one of my "top picks" may not be the best fit for me. You know, that's a really good point. I was thinking about this, and I bet if an agent said 'yes' to me, they'd m...
- December 11th, 2009, 10:04 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Light of Epertase
- Replies: 18
- Views: 9893
Re: The Light of Epertase
One more time (hopefully). As always, all help appreciated. Though still generic (magical event), I tried to tell a little more of what it does. I changed some of the query with hopes of answering everyone's questions a little more while subtly showing what is so important about this event. It makes...
- December 11th, 2009, 8:59 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Crit - SotA
- Replies: 14
- Views: 5941
Re: Query Crit - SotA
my goal is to have my rough draft revised and polished by my birthday, but i'm now advancing that to the end of January. This is my query, which i've gotten some advice on. i'd appreciate any comments you have, so i can get this ready to mail it out as soon as the novel is polished. Thanks. I'd rea...
- December 10th, 2009, 8:57 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Light of Epertase
- Replies: 18
- Views: 9893
Re: The Light of Epertase
I'm working on the suggestions but I have trouble with the "magical event" part as well. I only use that generic phrase because I can assume everyone understands it. The actual event has to do with the name of the book but is impossible to explain, even briefly, in a query (I've tried). I ...
- December 10th, 2009, 7:05 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Light of Epertase
- Replies: 18
- Views: 9893
Re: The Light of Epertase
Well, if no one else has any additional criticism of my query from a few posts back, I may send it out to a couple agents tomorrow. Feel free to tear it apart. I hope it's ready. Fingers crossed. Thanks for everyone's help.