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- November 30th, 2010, 11:36 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: VIRTUAL JERUSALEM, a novel--Satirical Thriller
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2208
Re: VIRTUAL JERUSALEM, a novel--Literary-Satire-Espionage
Dear Mr. Agent, Set in 2034 in an America drunk on religion and consumerism Virtual Jerusalem is the tongue-in-cheek epic of Ken Clarion, a retiring spy on a seemingly simple final mission that blossoms into a global crisis, forcing Ken to choose between his life and the plans of enemies who see th...
- November 28th, 2010, 11:29 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: Revision # 2
- Replies: 20
- Views: 8605
Re: THE SECOND DEATH OF JUAN LA ROCA: lit fiction query
Hi there! First of all, I totally understood the plot first read through and I think if you left it as is, you'd probably get requests! I wouldn't feel too much pressure to change this since everyone has different opinions. I'll offer a few suggestions which will probably second some of the other re...
- November 22nd, 2010, 9:53 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Revised query HARP-BROKEN, take 2 (at end)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3472
Re: Revised query HARP-BROKEN
Hi generous, wonderful, brilliant editor-people, I've been re-working my query and here's the latest version. Thanks SO MUCH for all your prior useful comments, and I would love to hear your thoughts on this iteration. C. ----------- Agent comments... In YA fantasy HARP-BROKEN, a girl finds her des...
- November 9th, 2010, 9:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY - TRIAL OF THE HEART - Which one?
- Replies: 23
- Views: 7308
Re: QUERY - TRIAL OF THE HEART - Which one?
That damn sliver of light at the end of the tunnel was only a shard of glass stuck in a rock! <grin> Based on additional feedback, I created version B. I have to be honest and say I'm at a loss deciding which way to go, so I'm throwing it out there for additional critique and feedback. *** VERSION ...
- November 9th, 2010, 8:26 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8156
Re: Romance Query: COVET
Hi. Wow, thanks again for the feedback, Priya and Erin! Glad you think placing that one sentence after introducing what Lucas does makes sense. I wasn't sure if it would flow, if I went from the hook to introducing what he does. I will throw in a "after some months away during battle..." s...
- November 8th, 2010, 2:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8156
Re: Romance Query: COVET * Revision posted at end*
Thank you D.Bond, wordranger, Severus Lawliet, ABFTomioka for the latest suggestions and encouragement! D.Bond--yes, the word count could very well be a dealbreaker right away. The first draft was 166,000, then it went down to 123,000 and I'm stuck at 117,000. I've read two agents in particular that...
- November 6th, 2010, 3:03 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY - TRIAL OF THE HEART - Which one?
- Replies: 23
- Views: 7308
Re: QUERY - TRIAL OF THE HEART * REVISED*
This is SO something I would love to read!! I think you have the query nailed. I just made a few tweaking suggestions. :) Okay, I've taken all your great comments and revised ... again! Please let me know what you think. Dear (Specific Agent), Emily Hennas has the power to ease one man’s painful suf...
- November 5th, 2010, 8:22 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - New Revision - Revision #3
- Replies: 15
- Views: 6211
Re: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - New Revision - Revision #1
Dear Agent: Castillia is a goddess with a strange sense of humor. She’s only manifested herself twice in history. The first time was in a king. The second time was in a prince. These guys made sense. They were respected leaders. Did she choose a king this time? No. A prince? Nope. This time, she ch...
- November 3rd, 2010, 9:49 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Hades heard
- Replies: 0
- Views: 910
Re: Hades heard
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- November 3rd, 2010, 9:10 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8156
Re: Romance Query: COVET
Hi! Thanks you so much for the feedback, very much appreciated. :D Okay, maybe I can have some opinions weigh in on the following issues if any of you are inclined to bear with me! 1) I do have a version that is specifically from Lucas' pov. The reason I did two distinct POVs was because I was tryin...
- November 2nd, 2010, 9:40 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8156
Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
Thanks for all your help! REVISION #2 as of 3/13/11: In a Kingdom feared for its powerful army, Lucas is highly ranked among the King’s Elite officers. His devotion is proudly given to the formidable ruler, a man he fights with side by side, but his heart belongs to Adelais. She’s the girl of his y...
- October 30th, 2010, 2:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - Possessed
- Replies: 23
- Views: 7219
Re: Query - Possessed
POSSESSED - Fourth Revision Dear Agent, Gabriel's life is a lie. He is not fourteen. He is not an ex midshipman in the British fleet. But he knows one thing. If he does not get out of the White Horizon Research Facility soon, he will be a corpse. Gabriel learns that the experiment he volunteered fo...
- October 30th, 2010, 2:04 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - New Revision - Revision #3
- Replies: 15
- Views: 6211
Re: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - YA Sci-Fi / Fantasy
Fishfood: Thanks. You made some good points. Actually, other than taunting from the other kids that don't like him, Steven is Magellan's biggest problem, but Magellan isn't even aware he's a problem since Steven works on the sly. My first draft of the query stayed closer to the "Steven wants M...
- October 29th, 2010, 9:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - New Revision - Revision #3
- Replies: 15
- Views: 6211
Re: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - YA Fantasy
Here is my first stab at a query for the novel I am really close to sending out. Thanks in advance for any insight! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Dear Agent: Magellan’s life is turned upside down...
- October 25th, 2010, 10:45 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Iron Pillar: Women's Fiction Query
- Replies: 28
- Views: 9561
Re: The Iron Pillar: Women's Fiction Query
Hi there! I purposely decided not to read the other posters' suggetions in hopes that maybe if I hit upon the same issues, it will help guide the trouble spots in your query and hopefully get you some requests! I know you have a GREAT story here, the query is just lacking some descriptiveness that w...