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- September 13th, 2011, 7:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: TELL ME THIS (formerly REDDO), YA Urban Fantasy new query
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3740
Re: TELL ME THIS (formerly REDDO), YA Urban Fantasy new query
I like what you've done to revamp it, and gotten rid of the quotation marks. Now the only general problem I see is that you're focusing almost solely on one event. We hear about the lead-up to her finding out he's a Reddo, but after that we don't know any external conflict. We just know the internal...
- September 11th, 2011, 2:03 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Where do characters come from?
- Replies: 14
- Views: 6152
Re: Where do characters come from?
My characters are amalgamations of people I've met or seen. Then there are some who are created because I wished they existed.
And they constantly surprise me. Many plot twists can be attributed to characters simply going where they want to go instead of where I intended.
And they constantly surprise me. Many plot twists can be attributed to characters simply going where they want to go instead of where I intended.
- September 11th, 2011, 1:56 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: "Griffin's Song" YA Adventure
- Replies: 15
- Views: 6403
Re: Query: "Griffin's Song" YA Adventure
Thanks to both of you! It helped a lot. Reading it with those comments made me realize how...sparse it was. I'm finding it hard to make a balance out of not surpassing 250 words and putting enough of the plot in. In this version, obviously, I leaned towards sparseness. I'll post the new query once I...
- September 11th, 2011, 1:52 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Writing a Trilogy
- Replies: 15
- Views: 13049
Re: Writing a Trilogy
Ahhh rewriting. The bane and tonic of a writer's existence.
- September 9th, 2011, 11:48 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Opinions On Posting First Chapters Online
- Replies: 25
- Views: 10122
Re: Opinions On Posting First Chapters Online
I'm not sure about unpublished first chapters (but I do too get the chills at the thought of posting it all online), but I do know I enjoy reading the first chapter of published books online. In fact the first book I purchased on my kindle was bought because I read the first chapter on a blog and ab...
- September 9th, 2011, 12:57 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: "Griffin's Song" YA Adventure
- Replies: 15
- Views: 6403
Query: "Griffin's Song" YA Adventure
Dear Agent, When fourteen-year-old Sarah Whitman is captured by pirates while en route to her fiancé, she can’t help feeling relieved at escaping the arranged marriage. There’s one small problem though – the captain of the Griffin's Song, Tiras, plans to kill her on her sixteenth birthday to ensure ...
- September 8th, 2011, 7:35 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: CP for fantasy YA
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1910
Re: CP for fantasy YA
What's the word count, and have you found anyone yet?
- September 8th, 2011, 7:08 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: IT'S BACK! IT'S BACK!
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3561
Re: IT'S BACK! IT'S BACK!
Congratulations! And lucky - my imagination is buried under revisions right now.
- September 8th, 2011, 7:06 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Following: psychological thriller
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2730
Re: The Following: psychological thriller
Dear (agent): In his quest to break a big story awkward phrasing , young journalist Tyson Palmer infiltrates a mind controlling cult, but soon falls under their control insert comma becoming an unwitting soldier in the army of with(?) a charismatic leader with a dark political agenda and no qualms a...
- September 7th, 2011, 1:42 pm
- Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
- Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
- Replies: 2655
- Views: 827333
Re: Do you have a new blog post?
My ramblings on the death of the 3rd person narrative
http://startingonthewritepage.blogspot.com/
http://startingonthewritepage.blogspot.com/
- September 7th, 2011, 1:32 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Finding Your Genre
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2499
Re: Finding Your Genre
Thanks for the advice and sympathy, Brenda! I might just go to a book store and try that. Will have to make sure I don't bring money though, because without fail I will exit with at least 4 books. And I don't think my bookcase can handle the extra weight.
- September 7th, 2011, 1:30 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: How to be Friends with a Writer
- Replies: 23
- Views: 11529
Re: How to be Friends with a Writer
Not to mention frustrated because we wish it was something we could whip out in a weekend, instead of the months that constitute reality.
- September 7th, 2011, 1:23 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First Page of "Beyond the Paradise"
- Replies: 15
- Views: 8405
Re: First Page of "Beyond the Paradise"
Good to know! Then for a romantic suspense you've definitely got a good hook. Then the feedback I would give is that you might want to include some indication of whether or not she's looking for a place to hide out, or meeting someone there for an interlude. Of course, this is just the first page, a...
- September 6th, 2011, 5:55 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Prologue - Diary of an escaped con
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3844
Re: Prologue - Diary of an escaped con
The one thing that jumped out at me was that you switched tenses. You'd be in past tense and then switch to present. Also, you might want to have a few more paragraph breaks, just to separate action. That, however is just a personal preference. Otherwise it looks like an interesting beginning to a s...
- September 6th, 2011, 5:41 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First Page of "Beyond the Paradise"
- Replies: 15
- Views: 8405
Re: First Page of "Beyond the Paradise"
I definitely like your hook. It makes me think this lady is angry with a bit of a devil-may-care attitude. But I was wondering, what is your genre? Is it meant to be a thriller, romance, what? And a short summary would help before making a critique So far I'm liking it!