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REVISED QUERY BELOW...I'd very much appreciate your feedback, thanks! Dear Agent, (Personalised sentence) NIGHT BUTTERFLY is a 65,000 word gritty suspense novel with romantic elements. When Valentina Lebedeva’s 14-year-old sister Anya goes missing, she must leave her home in Russia to find her. The ...

MHubbs, this sounds very interesting. Now let's see what I can do to help... I'm new to Nathan's blog and to the forum. Both have taught me a great deal already and I appreciate all the time and effort he has put into it. I'll be the next to throw myself to the lions. I've been paring down a query l...

BF, I read your first draft a few days ago; didn't comment because you were already revising. Now, having read the second draft, I just wanted to add confusion, and possibly frustration to the process! To me, the first attempt works better as a query. Short, clear and snappy - my opinion is it only ...

thanks everyone for taking the time n putting in the effort, I really appreciate all the comments! hopefully, revision should be a breeze! I look forward to hearing your views once I'm done. thanks again! c.ska ps not sure how to reply to the individual posts?! help please...meanwhile I'm afraid thi...

Doubt, in my opinion, is a writer's friend...used constructively it'll help you grow : )

Stay creative! c.ska

PLEASE SCROLL DOWN TO FIND REVISED VERSION NUMBER FOUR ! Thanks. I finished the book. I even wrote the synopsis. But the query, well, it has been in working progress for some time now. I'd really appreciate your thoughts! Thanks... Dear Agent, (Personalised sentence) NIGHT BUTTERFLY is a 65,000 wor...

shannon, while the query is as mentioned slightly confusing, it left me wanting to read MORE. this is a good sign. your query needs to come alive, that's all. I have a feeling the actual book is both coherent and vivid. I hope the following comments may help : ) Feedback appreciated. /deep breath: W...

sandy, let me have a go: ) Dear Agent: THE BEAST'S APPRENTICE is a YA fantasy re-telling of "Beauty and the Beast" set in late Victorian era. (sounds good to me!) Growing up, Faye (had no interest in her mother's bedtime fairy tales,) SPENT ( as) all her time (were spent) trying to keep he...

find my humble opinions below : ) Feedback very welcome. The box was cramped, dark and six feet underground. (love the first sentence) A year after his murder, Finneas Lamontagne (fabulous name...) awakes in his coffin to a voice whispering through the dirt above him offering him a second chance at ...

choculagrl, I know I come in late on this, so I will keep it brief. First of all, I love the title. I would buy this book on the title alone, though I know it is silly to judge a book by its title. I also find the premise intriguing. And, while I agree with most of the previous feedback about the us...