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- November 3rd, 2010, 5:13 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Bloody Hell, another synopsis, aaarrrgghh!
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2369
Re: Bloody Hell, another synopsis, aaarrrgghh!
All right, I'm actually Brazilian (born and raised!) so if you need any help with your book, send me a pm. Also, it seems to me there's a lot of Kardecist instruments here, so I'd advice you to watch the movie "Nosso Lar". I think it would help you a lot in your research, it would help you...
- October 8th, 2010, 9:44 am
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
- Replies: 21
- Views: 11546
Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?
This thread is a great idea! I'm looking, like everyone else here, for critique partners. I have written a 95.000 words YA fantasy in the final stages of revision. I'm a thorough critique partner, with an eagle eye for character development, showing x telling, plot inconcistensies, dialogues, flow a...
- October 3rd, 2010, 4:23 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3883
Re: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane
Thanks arbraun!
Wohoo, Im happy this looks good, you guys help me so much! You all ROCK! A LOT!
But please, if theres antything that doesnt sound good, or that can be improved, do tell =)
Wohoo, Im happy this looks good, you guys help me so much! You all ROCK! A LOT!
But please, if theres antything that doesnt sound good, or that can be improved, do tell =)
- October 3rd, 2010, 4:20 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis: "The Princess and the Pirate" (9-14 year olds)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5431
Re: Adventure fantasy synopsis for 9-14 year olds
ANA is a princess, and her grandmother SOL is a vicious pirate. Their worlds collide when the mysterious RANSOM sends Ana to find Sol and bring her home. He says Ana’s mum needs Sol’s help – but advises Ana not to actually tell Her Majesty about Sol’s return until later. Much, much later. When Ana ...
- October 3rd, 2010, 4:15 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2694
Re: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy
GEORGE is AUDREY PARKER’s (17) imaginary friend. He was supposed to leave her to six years ago. ‘The Council,’ his leaders, expect him to return to his world for a new human assignment—after all, girls her age aren’t supposed to have pretend friends. Instead, he stays tucked in the back of her imag...
- October 3rd, 2010, 4:05 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis: Book of Shadows
- Replies: 13
- Views: 6460
Re: Synopsis: Book of Shadows
Alex Benson just lost his wife to suicide, but that’s the least of his worries. With his wife's death haunting his thoughts, he finds he can no longer live a normal life and ends up at an Apostolic Pentecostal church. But the gods frown down on him again as his comfort zone is soon disrupted by an ...
- October 1st, 2010, 11:26 am
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3362
Re: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction
Thats really, really tricky Dave. I can only tell you how I'd handle this, which might not work at all. After all, I dont know your story in all its details and beauties, so, this might work for me, but it can also be a bunch of horses****, you know. In the end, we really have to do what we think it...
- October 1st, 2010, 11:10 am
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3883
Re: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane
Thanks so much Whipslip! Actually, Lian wants revenge ont he shadow man because he planned her parents murders as well. But her first goal is to kill the Masha that shot them, and only the shadow man knows where they are. Therefore, she joins him, but will 'take care' of him when she's ready. Ill tr...
- October 1st, 2010, 11:08 am
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: THE WYRM FIEND a YA Urban Fantasy UPDATED
- Replies: 11
- Views: 5075
Re: THE WYRM FIEND a YA Urban Fantasy UPDATED
Though most dragons have gone into hiding over the past few centuries, sixteen year old Chris Drake and his best friend, Yvonne Steele, are ready become modern dragon slayers. To finish their training, they must kill the dragon that their dads, Tim Drake and Derek Steele Wouldnt mention their names....
- October 1st, 2010, 10:58 am
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3362
Re: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction
San Martín deserts from the Spanish Army, absconding to Buenos Aires. Desperate to free his homeland, he must first free himself from his opium addiction. Interesting beginning here. Catalina’s Whats her connection to San Martin? father is murdered, leaving her to fend for herself in Valparaiso, but...
- September 23rd, 2010, 3:35 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Whip-Slip query
- Replies: 68
- Views: 20259
Re: The Whip-Slip query
I really, really liked the latest version. One question though: Is her guardian Left-Hander? That wasnt very clear.
But on every other aspect: Congrats!!!
But on every other aspect: Congrats!!!
- September 23rd, 2010, 3:31 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3041
Re: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL
As others have said, your hook is definetly missing. A great advice someone here on the forums gave me is: Be specific. What did his son die of? Why does he burns the sheets? And so on. Being specific doesnt mean detailistic, specificity is filling us with entertaining details that helps us relate t...
- September 21st, 2010, 4:29 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Jade's Hurricane: 6th try
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3012
Re: Jade's Hurricane: 6th try
Thank you whipslip, I think I got it fixed! =D
- September 21st, 2010, 4:28 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Fantasy Novel Query-- "3rd" draft
- Replies: 17
- Views: 7631
Re: Fantasy Novel Query
I like this premise, a lot! I agree with others, we dont need the backstory on Ravenel and the knight. You could start by Kellek and the dracodane (which is probably one of the coolest things I've ever read! A dragon in the human form, brilliant =) And then you say: only the Knight can stop a monstr...
- September 21st, 2010, 4:21 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Forever Young: The Rebirth revised..again
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2897
Re: Forever Young: The Rebirth revised..again
I liked it a lot more then the first. thanks fersnerfer! Yea, ms word kept auto correcting the or to 'and' for some reason...I thought or sounded better myself. Is this better? Aaren Danielson is a teenaged martial arts student whose life gets seriously screwed up when his adoptive parents drop a bo...