Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Twelve-year-old Heidi Meyers wants nothing more than to have fun fooling around in class. Did someone say substitute teacher equals no work? Heck, yeah! I already like your character's spunk. She's twelve! She should want to have fun! However, Mrs. Podge has other plans for Heidi and her classmates....

The strange boy jumped off the cliff, pulling Sydney with him. Like someone said above, this sounds more like a line out of the novel. I like that your trying to start with something exciting, but I can't really appreciate the moment since I don't have a clue who is who or why this strange boy is pu...

Dear [Agent], Dani Strider’s deepest wish is to belong, but the blood in her veins won't allow it. A good strong start, but I have to wonder: where else would her blood be? She bears a legacy she knows nothing about and with it comes powerful magic she can’t control. All she can do is keep her emoti...

Personally, I like it! It focuses on the right things, Sam's ability and the consequences it has in his life, and also shows why it's so important to him to try and stop Gabby's death--hence the romance. I feel like one more line at the end, something to just tie it all together and get me really it...

Hi everyone! I've been lurking around on this site for a while, and finally decided to register today because I love reading the comments you guys give. So if any of you want to have a go at my query, I'd be grateful! Be brutal, because I've been querying for a while and it hasn't been getting me mu...