Nathan Bransford - The Forums

*listens to the crickets* Wow, guess I scared everyone. Though looking at my initial post I can't say I blame anyone. I can tell it was reeeaalll late at night when that was written. >.< I tend to apologize and babble when I'm tired and it shows. Nuts. btw, my DA page is http://gaoyuqing.deviantart....

Ok, after listening to and pondering over the great feedback I've recieved from the wonderful people on here, I have worked through version after version of my query. If I wasn't already bald, I would be now. How is it that trying to write a 300-word tidbit can be so much harder than writing the boo...

Oops...apologies. Once again I wish I could delete threads instead of posts. Moving now.

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Thanks Sari. Actually yeah, I posted my latest version to the board last night having changed things up to address some of the issues that have been brought up. I remember reading that query shark post I think. I wrote a version of my query with that kind of thing in mind, it just ended up sounding ...

*lifts his hands to the keyboard to respond, reads SariBelle's corrections and puts his hands down*
In all honesty everything I was going to say or correct or comment about she hit, so...yeah...what she said. You can add the weight of my opinion for what it's worth on the points she made.

Hey thanks...funny all the directions these things go. And it seems you understand..people keep wanting more 'details' so you give more details and then you end up with a synopsis. AGH! I think I agree. I'm going to go back to the last version (this is exhausting!) and tweak and be done with it. Fo...

Forgive me in advance for some re-writes. Sometime the best way I know how to explain a problem is by writing it in a way that doesn't bother me. Thanks JQ and Barbara. Your comments were so helpful. I hope I've done them justice in this revision. Dear [Agent], Dani Strider’s deepest desire is to b...

Thanks in advance!! Now I'm afraid this is too long ;( I'm not sure where to cut/what to summarize without sounding 'vague' as so many are warning against. So, I think I may have given too many details with this go. Thoughts? made a comment just like this about a query of my own recently :) I don't...

Please ignore this post and refer to Born to Bondage query II. I don't want to be accused of cluttering up the forum. Any moderators feel free to delete this Ok, after listening to and pondering over the great feedback I've recieved from the wonderful people on here, I have worked through version a...

Wild: I hear you, but that's where the whole K Nelson method for queries come in. According to her <insert my paraphrase> you include info and hook about the opening part of your book and just do a teaser about what follows after, being deliberately vague. And I had thought I was doing this. But the...

Hi again. I just wanted to clarify why I slashed so much. It's not that I don't want you to include details -- you absolutely should. But I thought there was too much of the plot included, going too far into the book. Instead, give us more details about about the setup, the opening chapters. Focus ...

GaoYuQing You have an interesting story here. Good descriptions and details. I tried to go through and make suggestions, but I realized I was just cutting. I think that's the big issue here. So, my thought. Cut 1/3 of the query. And that should be easy because...you repeat info in each paragraph. C...

I feel your pain GaoYuQing. It really is that subjective. Have you tried reading QueryCShark's blog? She has some very good pointers (as she shreds queries apart) and I felt that I learned a lot from her website. one of the things that I found most frustrating was just how subjective the whole proc...

I feel your pain. Wanna create a scream choir? :3 As I grouse in the last post in my query thread, everyone seems to want different things, both the reviewers here and the agents I've researched so it can feel a bit like an excersize in futility sometime. Still--to reassure everyone reading this who...