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by Dankrubis
February 5th, 2011, 4:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 8754

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK

Thanks for more feedback. BTW, Dankrubis, I am curious which part of the last line you felt was corny. I understand that I might have gone a little over the top, but I am curious where exactly, you felt I crossed the line. :) Just wondering if you could go into a finer detail on it. And I do mean t...
by Dankrubis
February 4th, 2011, 8:18 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How We Relate to Writing
Replies: 24
Views: 11847

Re: How We Relate to Writing

I've been thinking about this lately as well. I wouldn't say I love writing. I mean, I love it when I'm on a tear, as I'm sure anyone does, but that's, what, five percent of the time? Maybe less? The rest is forcing yourself to sit and write, which I kinda hate. Hell, I should be writing an article ...
by Dankrubis
February 4th, 2011, 12:28 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
Replies: 21
Views: 8754

Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK

Hello! I'm bored and I haven't critiqued a query in a while. I may be rusty. Anywho, things I take issue with are in red. My thoughts are in blue. In the walled city of Bollingbrook, beneath airships and mountainous cathedrals, a young girl named Skyla , runs for her life. Is that comma after Skyla ...
by Dankrubis
February 3rd, 2011, 11:33 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: For the "losers".
Replies: 41
Views: 10623

Re: For the "losers".

Please do not be cynical. I hate cynicism. For the record, it's my least favorite quality. It doesn't lead anywhere. Nobody in life gets exactly what they thought they were going to get. But if you work really hard and you're kind, amazing things will happen. I'm telling you. Amazing things will hap...
by Dankrubis
February 3rd, 2011, 12:46 am
Forum: Books
Topic: Thieves and ignorance.
Replies: 121
Views: 29305

Re: Thieves and ignorance.

I, for one, welcome our new kleptomaniacal overlords! And thanks, Guardian! When CRYSTAL SHADE ANGENI comes out as books and movies or whatever, we'll all steal it with your full approval. Meanwhile, I won't mention the onerous Terms Of Use and Ownership Of Contents page on your website. Or the Con...
by Dankrubis
February 2nd, 2011, 3:01 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Your first Pargraph!
Replies: 80
Views: 42778

Re: Your first Pargraph!

I'll take a crack at it. Things I take issue with are in red. My comments in blue. One year after daddy’s death – one year after finding him cold and stiff beside me in the bed we shared - I decided to take on the task of putting away his personal possessions. Sharing a bed with daddy? Pretty creepy...
by Dankrubis
January 29th, 2011, 2:46 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Question .....
Replies: 3
Views: 1482

Re: Question .....

He uses the skills he learned in finding his sister (or almost) as a platform to start a private detective business. Doesn't sound far fetched at all.
by Dankrubis
January 28th, 2011, 5:29 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Your first Pargraph!
Replies: 80
Views: 42778

Re: Your first Pargraph!

Just an example- "Put down dem books an git yer daddy a beer, boy." This made me laugh out loud. I'm glad you liked my paragraph, and I think humor is definitely needed in my story. Do you mind terribly if I use this line? Also, thanks so much Holly! I'm so happy that people are liking th...
by Dankrubis
January 28th, 2011, 2:34 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Your first Pargraph!
Replies: 80
Views: 42778

Re: Your first Pargraph!

I can't see a thing. I'm waving my hand in front of my face and I can't see it. Am I blind or is it pitch black? My eyes don't hurt or anything. Can you really go blind from drinking or is that an old wives' tale? Where am I? Am I in a bathtub? Feels like a bathtub. Why does it smell like shit in h...
by Dankrubis
January 27th, 2011, 5:53 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Your first Pargraph!
Replies: 80
Views: 42778

Re: Your first Pargraph!

Awesome paragraph, Josin. Love that last line. Just might get you into the finals again. I'm not jealous. I'M NOT. Here's my paragraph. It's a little silly, but I'm kinda happy with it for now. Once Nathan announces the finalists and I'm not one of them, I'm sure I'll find a reason to hate it. I can...
by Dankrubis
December 14th, 2010, 5:22 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Look at what you're missing, Nathan
Replies: 8
Views: 6635

Look at what you're missing, Nathan

I'm sorry, I know making fun of people is looked down upon on in these forums, but this is just fantastic. Found the following post on craigslist under writing gigs- I need and editor and Literary Agent My book will sell at least 40 million copies (714) XXX- 9150 If you have the know how & conta...
by Dankrubis
September 21st, 2010, 10:03 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Arcade Fire - The Suburbs
Replies: 10
Views: 6912

Re: Arcade Fire - The Suburbs

My wife's been chanting "Rococo" around the house for about two weeks now. It's kinda adorable.
by Dankrubis
March 23rd, 2010, 7:56 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Best TV show of all time?
Replies: 47
Views: 17129

Re: Best TV show of all time?

The Wire is definitely the best TV show of all time. Mos def. Probably followed by The Sopranos or BSG or Six Feet Under or Arrested Development. As far as what's on now, the BSG guys are doing a phenomenal job with Caprica. I really hope a lot of people watch it because it deserves 5 - 6 seasons. A...
by Dankrubis
February 9th, 2010, 5:01 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: Forum Suggestions Box
Replies: 97
Views: 140298

Re: Forum Suggestions?

Another suggestion- A TV Subcategory. It is a bit of a running theme on your blog.
by Dankrubis
February 9th, 2010, 2:17 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Bulwer-Lytton Contest Winners
Replies: 9
Views: 4433

Re: Bulwer-Lytton Contest Winners

I am simply loving #3. Thanks for sharing!