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by Username
June 15th, 2010, 4:10 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 405293

Re: Ask Nathan

Has anybody already asked this? When your novel gets published will you be sending a copy to LeVar Burton with an attached letter communicating how much Reading Rainbow meant to you, and how it influenced your life? I'm guessing LeVar would be thrilled to receive one such package in the mail. If I e...
by Username
June 15th, 2010, 2:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

Thanks again for the comments, guys. This has been a very positive experience. How amazing, the suggestions people made! Of my original query, people said that commas were out of place, or not used at all, that the word 'that' was... er, over-used, that there were unnecessary adverbs, and redundant ...
by Username
June 15th, 2010, 2:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

It's a Mad Mad Mad Mad World - in book from... yes!

I would agree completely with this. I might even use that in the query letter! Thank you, thank you, and thank you again!

Also, I made the changes, Emily. Thanks.
by Username
June 15th, 2010, 2:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

I'm beginning to re-think the word 'that'.

I think that maybe I do over-use it?
by Username
June 14th, 2010, 10:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

For whatever it's worth, here's one of the crazy things I was thinking about this afternoon (sadly, this is the sort of thing that happens when you've got too much time on your hands). Apparently The Beetles, when writing songs, would often take their ideas and mull them over in front of family memb...
by Username
June 14th, 2010, 7:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

Thanks for the encouragement. I'm still not sure (that!) it's good enough. I wonder if it will convince anybody here to click on the link and read the excerpt - LOL! Ah well, I'm trying... I'm trying. Thanks for the help, guys. EDIT: Jesus, now that I look at it from the distance of six hours, I can...
by Username
June 14th, 2010, 5:21 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

Okay, thanks, guys. I made the changes. Hopefully it's better now. Thanks, Lachrymal, you were right about mostly everything.
by Username
June 14th, 2010, 3:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

Also, a few of you have actually read this excerpt. Maybe you could help me out here.

The two forum members above have both wanted to know what genre this novel fits into? But how do I classify a novel that doesn't really fit into any genre?
by Username
June 14th, 2010, 3:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

Re: The Incredible Race Query Letter

Iachrymal, thanks for the suggestions. I've implemented a few of them - but not all. Clearly, you dislike the word 'that'. LOL! I actually believe that editors (whoops, I did it again!) have gotten a little carried away in the past decade or so in attempting to remove this word from sentences - yes,...
by Username
June 14th, 2010, 12:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Incredible Race Query Letter
Replies: 57
Views: 16575

The Incredible Race Query Letter

I posted an excerpt of my story in the excerpts section of this forum. Thanks to a few of the forum members, who encouraged me to write this, I've finally written a query letter for this novel. I hope you like it. Note that I've been revising this according to the suggestions made by the helpful peo...
by Username
June 13th, 2010, 5:44 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Incredible Race
Replies: 50
Views: 22411

Re: The Incredible Race

Oh thanks for clarifying that - yes, I see what you mean now. But to be honest - I did give up on this work. Maybe in posting the above excerpt here I'm working my way back towards giving it another go. But as mostly everyone else here has done with their own work, I invested a lot of emotion in thi...
by Username
June 13th, 2010, 3:45 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: On the Fringe Page One
Replies: 5
Views: 2441

Re: On the Fringe Page One

I would discourage any unpublished author from writing a lengthy dream sequence - especially to begin their novel. Most literary agents, I'm guessing, view the dream sequence as being the single most tired plot device in all of literature (every high school student on the face of the planet has prob...
by Username
June 13th, 2010, 3:34 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Incredible Race
Replies: 50
Views: 22411

Re: The Incredible Race

Okay, I'll do it then - thanks!
by Username
June 13th, 2010, 12:38 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Incredible Race
Replies: 50
Views: 22411

Re: The Incredible Race

I don't actually have much of a query letter. The novel's not actually 'about' anything at all. I was just having fun with this (I was kind of hoping that it would show in the writing). The novel's just about a race around the world. That's it. LOL! Also, the last agent I sent this work to was a loc...
by Username
June 12th, 2010, 10:04 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Incredible Race
Replies: 50
Views: 22411

Re: The Incredible Race

rmorris, negative disclaimer?

I'm not sure what you mean?