Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Hi. New here so don't take me too seriously. You are most likely right about a YA audience not understanding the established meaning of channeling, but I have to agree with everyone else - you can't ignore that there's this thing that's been around and called channeling since long before any of us w...

*The Newest Latest Version is currently on page 5* Hi. I'm really new here. I've been trying to get around and offer feedback (such that it is), but still feel a bit like a cheater posting my query. Anyway any feedback would be greatly appreciated. This is a revamped version of a query that Nathan ...

Hi. Please don't take anything I say as gospel - I'm new here, but here are my two cents. I have chosen to submit to you because I enjoy your writing style and have found your website an excellent resource for a new novelist. this should probably go at the end of your query First there’s Griffin Tut...

Still very green at this, and just my impressions so please take them with a grain of salt. I know putting a query together is a very frustrating business. I think you've got a solid idea here, but I had some trouble with some of the phrasing. Your first sentence seems rather long and a little awkwa...

Hi. I'm exceedingly new at this, so feel free to ignore me. I like the idea and I this 2nd version is definitely an improvement, but it feels to me that there's still too much detail. With a bit more pruning I think it'll really stand out. Version 2. Please let me know your thoughts. Thanks for your...

New at this and not an expert (at anything!), but I think you're better off with commas here instead of semicolons.

kenpochick wrote:Isabella is thrilled to be starting the third grade with her friends Betha; a witch, and Jack; a werewolf.

Love the idea, though, even if I'm not into kids books.

Hi. Brand spanking new at this, but here goes.

This sounds like a really intriguing idea, but I'd have to agree with some of the other posters. I kept waiting for something to come to head as the query went on, but it just sort of petered out. That's fixable though.