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- February 7th, 2010, 11:15 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: So, you've got a zillion characters, things, places...
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2422
Re: So, you've got a zillion characters, things, places...
Many Fantasy novels do need an appendix, I agree, like LOTR. But I think in this digital age of the internets the paper for an appendix could be saved. If it's a case of 'fliping to the appendix to find out what the hell is going on' then the writing could probably be touched up.
- February 7th, 2010, 9:38 am
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: East Coast Blizzard (Friday, Feb. 5)
- Replies: 48
- Views: 18850
Re: East Coast Blizzard (Friday, Feb. 5)
I'm at the beach here in Virginia and I've been watching how much the snow has been piling up on the news in those areas not so far away from me. How unfair, though honestly I am glad we dont have to deal with it. As lovely as the snow can be, feet of it seems more like a pain. We got a lot of rain ...
- February 6th, 2010, 6:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Butterfly Key- revision now on page 6
- Replies: 56
- Views: 16701
Re: Query - The Butterfly Key- revision now on page 4
Looks good, don't think there is anything major to add to it.
Something minor: "Christian realizes he needs to go home and apologize for being unfair to Abigail." Can cross out for being unfair and it would flow better. Just a thought.
Something minor: "Christian realizes he needs to go home and apologize for being unfair to Abigail." Can cross out for being unfair and it would flow better. Just a thought.
- February 6th, 2010, 5:24 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: The Valley and the Shadow - new version page 3
- Replies: 26
- Views: 9580
Re: Query: The Valley and the Shadow
I think it's time I take a step back from this, as I have been thinking about it and working on it for far too long. My brain is frazzled . I liked the original concept I had been working on, but then I started thinking it was too passive and just wasn't gripping enough. Either way, this is the draf...
- February 6th, 2010, 12:04 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: Worst Query Competition
- Replies: 29
- Views: 10443
Re: Worst Query Competition
Can Klark save his town of Smallvillage from the invading aliens known only as H.A.H.A? Laser gun battles ensue when H.A.H.A.’s bioengineered race of super-vampires kidnap Dan’s mother, Mary Magdalita, who was the only person that could decipher the 2000 year old painting which foretold the coming e...
- February 5th, 2010, 9:32 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: I feel so out of the loop, but...
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5328
Re: I feel so out of the loop, but...
Hey, Christi IS a huge Star Wars nerd. I'm an all sorts nerd. D&D, Magic the Gathering, Harry Potter role play, comic books, chess, lifelong Trekkie, and dual monitors because I can't get enough of cyberspace in just one... I revel in my geekdom. I have 3 monitors set up and I am trying to find...
- February 5th, 2010, 8:16 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: East Coast Blizzard (Friday, Feb. 5)
- Replies: 48
- Views: 18850
Re: East Coast Blizzard (Friday, Feb. 5)
Here at the beach it's only raining, which is what it usually does when "The Snow" is forcast. We did get snow last week which was a surprise, but I don't expect to see anything other than rain this week. No winterland fun for me.
- February 5th, 2010, 12:33 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Butterfly Key- revision now on page 6
- Replies: 56
- Views: 16701
Re: Query -- The Butterfly Key -- Complete revision ON PAGE 2
Very well done. I have only a few small things to point out, otherwise I think its very good. I'm hoping to tighten the screws even more on my query, I present to you what I hope is my final version. So if you all give me your 2 cents worth, Ill make sure to give you change in return!!! Thank you al...
- February 5th, 2010, 12:20 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Time Tourism again, just when you thought it was over
- Replies: 57
- Views: 17647
Re: Query Time Tourism Edited for the last time, I think
Wow, I like it! I couldn't find anything I would change about it. Good job and good luck!
- February 5th, 2010, 1:30 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Butterfly Key- revision now on page 6
- Replies: 56
- Views: 16701
Re: Query -- The Butterfly Key -- Complete revision ON PAGE 2
Hi, Tycoon. I've been trying to stay away from the queries which already have a lot of comments, as to not add so many (confusing) opinions to the mix, but you commented in mine which I thank you for. It seems, from what I've read, that your query has come a long way. I really like it. *************...
- February 4th, 2010, 1:21 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Time Tourism again, just when you thought it was over
- Replies: 57
- Views: 17647
Re: Query Time Tourism Edited Again (please don't hate me)
Personally I found it very helpful whenever someone showed me how they would change/reword my query... Wow. When someone rewords my writing, I violently spasm. I like different perspectives, it opens doors that I hadn't seen before. To each thier own, I guess. Christi, don't think you're annoying a...
- February 4th, 2010, 12:07 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Time Tourism again, just when you thought it was over
- Replies: 57
- Views: 17647
Re: Query Time Tourism Edited Again (please don't hate me)
I meant to say something similar to what Dankrubis said in his preface. You are going to get a lot of opinions here, but it doesnt mean you have to use them all and change your query with each one. Personally I found it very helpful whenever someone showed me how they would change/reword my query, b...
- February 3rd, 2010, 11:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Time Tourism again, just when you thought it was over
- Replies: 57
- Views: 17647
Re: Query Time Tourism Edited Again and again and again...
Dear Great and Noble Agent of Oz, Hurled into the future twenty years, young Jakorus is confronted with a horrifying truth: his world has changed, and it’s his fault. The hook is good and makes me want to read more His older self, haggard and worn beyond his years, warns against the seductive power...
- February 3rd, 2010, 9:04 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: The Valley and the Shadow - new version page 3
- Replies: 26
- Views: 9580
Re: Query: The Valley and the Shadow
Again, thanks to everyone for such great help. Kirril- It was a frame, and it didn't flow well at all, which was why I didn't want to use it in the first place. Thanks for your suggestions, if you have a query up and want my input, let me know. I'm trying to go through and critique others as I get t...
- February 3rd, 2010, 8:27 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query Time Tourism again, just when you thought it was over
- Replies: 57
- Views: 17647
Re: Query Time Tourism Revised Umteeth Time
Here is a stab at your query. I read briefly through some of the above, but I will focus on what you have here. Dear Agent Who Wishes I'd Stop Wasting Your Time, Hurled into the future twenty years, young Jakorus is confronted with a horrifying truth: the world has changed, What world? It makes me w...