Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Here we go again. Thanks Quill. You really know your stuff. I did my best, my brain is now throbbing and everything. My only worry is that the query is even more wordy than before trying to cover all the bases you mentioned. Perhaps there is a more efficient way, and if there is, please let me know...

Dear agent: When a wildlife photographer witnesses the crash of a mysterious black triangle in Washington, D.C.’s Rock Creek Park, a chain of events begins. College student Travis Maguire discovers the photographer’s Nikon and searches for the wreck with two friends, beautiful UFO buff Lexie Collins...

Dear agent: When a wildlife photographer witnesses the crash of a mysterious black triangle in Washington, D.C.’s Rock Creek Park, a chain of events begins. College student Travis Maguire discovers the photographer’s Nikon and searches for the wreck with two friends, beautiful UFO buff Lexie Collins...

Looks like glj bleed all over yours too.

Why thank you, Falls Apart and clara_w!!!!!

I'm definitely going to keep it simple by doing just the Brody-Cole dynamic, like you said, since that is the main focus of the story. Thank you, once again! The title ties in because Brody gives Tabitha a superhero alias: Nightframe. I'm going to take a week, and really try to get this right. I'm g...

Thank you, Nathan! That was very helpful!

('m sure you just probably left this stuff out. But, incase you didn't know, you're suppose to lead a query with: your name, personal information, agency information, and 'dear, agent's name.') Here is the body only of my work in progress. I welcome any and all feedback. ( I really hope you do.) A b...

She's an entrepreneur and has established herself pretty well. I'm not sure how much doe she's got. She looks well manicured. She's got an expensive weeve. If I learned anything about watching Chris Rock's documentary on weeves, then I know that good hair is pricey!!!!! So, I imagine she has some mo...

She owns her own publishing company now. I forgot to add that part in.

Mary Catharine, I apologize in advance for my previous post. I hope it did not come across as offensive or nasty, and merely as the result of a sick mind sitting in front of a computer and avoiding doing my actual work. I hope that you find some useful bits in my post. An additional bit of advice i...

Hey William, You want to know something funny? I believe you. You've say you've written something that's good, and I believe you. There are, indeed, many great writers on this forum... however, we are not marketers! Here is some great advice I received from some one on this site that just might help...

Mary Edmondson (personal information) (Agent information) Dear Agent, Teenage misfit Tabitha Colquitt is certain above all things that she's a werewolf. But, no matter how Brody's human scent might be tempting, her love for him is the only thing keeping her human. What she is uncertain of is if she ...

You're steps really helped me, I'm trying to apply them to my query. It's really helped me get focus and not feel like my head had been cut off and running around like a chicken. *Shivers to decapitated chicken visual*

Mary-Catherine, I love the style you are going for here, but I'm wondering if you're answering the basic questions that a query should answer. I've read these questions (or variations of them) on several blogs (the Query Shark may be one of them). I've tried applying these four questions to your qu...