Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Pretty much what's been said - we need something more about Guy to root for him. Also, and this is me - I'm curious why Sloane wants to settle some playground debt. That seems kind of petty - but I like that it brings in their history and adds another layer to the plot, I'm just not sure it's explai...

One of the difficulties I'm having with writing the query is trying to make it sound interesting and it comes off sounding like a romance which it isn't, it's a love story, a story about a marriage in trouble. Another difficult thing about the story being character driven is having to pull back out...

Part of the trouble for me is that the events you mention are sort of disjointed, and seem to be just the set up of the story. I'm guessing the bulk of the action is Connor going to New York and what happens there, but that's glossed over. I don't see how this story is any different from an average ...

Thanks, everyone.

Lunetta22 wrote: I think Janet Reid favors "thank you for your time and consideration."

Janet Reid does NOT favor 'thank you for your time.' It's one of her peeves. Your time is just as valuable as hers.

Hey Ben, Great job! I'd definitely want to read pages with either version, but the second is a bit better. I'd take Ghost in the Machine's advice about a bit of clarification on the first para, and maybe give a specific about how his father uses the family in Texas to get Avicus back, or revenge for...

Hello everyone! I'm new and I've begun contributing critiques of others' works and thought I'd offer one up myself. The novel is in revisions. I find writing my query helps me focus on what I want to do IN those revisions! (I like writing queries, though. I'm odd like that.) ---------- Dear Correctl...

I have to read. It fills my creative well not with specific ideas but with art and inspiration in general. It's how I recharge. I always write better when I'm reading. Oddly, I read mostly genre (fantasy) but I write mainstream (which I read, but not nearly as much as genre.) I want to read MORE of ...

Hi, I hope I can help somewhat. I'm an American, so I might not be helpful at all but I do see things that might want attention regardless of culture. :) “All men are bastards” says Shefali Belliappa to close my completed 81,000 word psychological thriller “IT CAN’T BE YOU” Wait, now I know how it ...

Hi, Dan. It's really hard to write a query for a book that isn't, as the above commenter put it, hookish. Ah, the joys of writing mainstream fiction, right? (I do it, too.) That said, you still need to make it stand out from all the other I-don't-have-explosions stories. Let's break down your query...

taylormillgirl-thanks for your kind words. A revision is below. Answered most questions, except for the first one, which I think creates a little needed intrigue. Dear Agent: Jake Wakely is no stranger to being a stranger. He’s lived abroad for the first thirteen years of his life. But after being ...

I agree with what's been said. It's got a lot going on and could use some clarification. THE BASEMENT is a story of self-discovery. With the help of aptitude test answer key drawings, a high class call girl/psychoanalyst and the voice of his deceased grandfather, Cyrus makes sense of his life. He al...