Nathan Bransford - The Forums

I agree with Alexandra about the struggle to decide between action and not. It is weak. I'm trying to find a way to rework the sentence because I'm sure it's really not what you mean. Maybe the protag needs to decide who to tell since the princess won't believe, in order to save his friend's life. I...

I also prefer the first query, except for using the word legend so closely (back to back sentences). It flows well, and I have a good understanding of the storyline. The only thing I wonder about is the army. If they are coming to destroy the land, isn't that a bad thing? Or do they only want to det...