Nathan Bransford - The Forums

I think Ghosts advice is solid "READ IT OUT LOUD"

I have my wife listen to me... she likes it when I read to her!

Grats and Good luck!

35 and more silver hair than I know what to do with.

Ghost in the Machine wrote:Hi Tycoon,

I worked on the synopsis and sent it back via a PM, twice. My outbox is reading 0, so I'm confused. Did you get it? If not I'll try again. What can I say? The Ghost is blond.

Nope... as of yet I have not received it... ill keep looking though!

Ghost in the Machine wrote:Hi Tycoon,

Do you have enough cutlery left after our query-fest to hurl back at me? If so, count me in.

Ghost in the Machine

Thanks ghost.... I sent you a PM

Woot Woot Woot!!!

Grats!

Work calls and asks you, "WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU?!?!"

When you keep hitting the refresh button to see if anyone has replied to your post!!!!

Hello everyone, After a 2 week sabbatical from all things computer, I am back refreshed and ready to try and help others. Currently I am looking for 3 to 5 volunteers who helped me with my query to go over my synopsis and make it tight. If your interested just leave me a message here or PM me... Tha...

Ghost in the Machine wrote:Hi Tycoon,

Just a few more tweaks . . . NOT! Stick a fork in me, I'm done. You are good to go.

Congrats - Ghost

I got a whole-lot-o-forks for you!!!

Thx for the help!

Woot!!! grats... My wife and I are trying for our 4th... I have all girls so a boy would be nice for me!!!

Hi Tycoon, I haven't read any of your other revisions of this query, so I'm coming to it fresh. It read well to me. I don't think you need the first sentence though. The information in it is mostly conveyed in the next two sentences. Just add his last name to the second sentence and maybe the fact ...

KKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK ----- Again Dear Agent, Shortly after Christian Bryson promises to fulfill his wife’s dream of starting a family, his Army Reserve unit deploys for war. In battle, Christian sustains a wound which renders him incapable of fathering children. Devastated, Christian...

This is the one you should go with.. I rearranged it... tell me what you think. Lucinda’s fate has always been dictated by circumstances beyond her control. So when she is offered liberation from the cruel world of the living she turns her back on God. Forsaking the light of the His sun, she embrac...

KK again again again Dear Agent, Shortly after Christian Bryson promises to fulfill his wife’s dream of starting a family, his Army Reserve unit deploys for war. In battle, Christian sustains a wound which renders him incapable of fathering children. Devastated, Christian agonizes over telling Abiga...