Nathan Bransford - The Forums

So I spent an hour studying the five queries Janet Reid has give a thumbs up to at Query Shark , gutted my original query, and created this revision: Dear Query Shark Nashau was just sacked after thirty years as the Baron d'Bluefield's minister of prophecy. He got the baron’s son and heir killed. Al...

What about Monkees vs. Da Bears. Sure Ditka is driving, but I think all the girls trying to touch Davey Jones would cause such a glut on the field that the band could sneak into the end zone.

The two I have tattooed on my person are: "The righteous must be bold as a lion." "Drop the truth like a hammer." Others I enjoy are: "Nothing great ever arose to touch the skies unless some man dreamed that it could, some man thought that it should, and some man willed that...

RebeccaKnight wrote:Okay, tweaking has been done. Does this make it less confusing? Or did I just make it worse? :P Thanks again for all your help!

Dramatic improvement. Well done!

Dear Beautiful, Kind, Intelligent Agent, (that's a joke, in case you don't hear tone-of-voice in emails like my father) This kind of intro gets used as an example of what not to do in a lot of agents'/slush lords' "how to" posts. And let me tell you, I have done the same and it never work...

Hi Rebecca Here are my suggestions. I hope they help. First, you misspelled seeking in your first sentence. :) Second, I'm a big believer in Kristin Nelson's query design. Emulate back cover copy. BCC is a pitch meant to grab the attention of a prospective reader. A query is a pitch meant to grab th...

Nathan Bransford wrote:Only one correct answer, there is.

That's right: Firefly.