Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Is it terrible that I pretty much live inside my head? So mostly no, I don't go licking walls or eating strange things to write with better description. Maybe I should? One thing I have done, though, is gone on field trips. I have been writing a real-world modern-day fantasy series which takes place...

First section of my current work in progress, currently named, THE TIME. It's a YA action novel. Be gentle with me please! ;-) Sorry its so long, its the first half of the first chapter, so six a4 pages lol I hope you enjoy!!! I blinked a couple of times as I tried to figure out where I was. Vague ...

Here is my synopsis. As always, any comments are wonderful! ** Synopsis Reborn and on the run from the supernatural mercenaries she served in a former life, I think this raised a lot of questions regarding how Lillim was reborn/who she was in a former life/why are the mercenaries supernatural or ot...

Hi.... This is my first chapter of a light-hearted, young adult adventure/fantasy. Any and all comments would be greatly appreciated! CHAPTER ONE I’ve come to the conclusion that there are certain days when it’s best not to get out of bed in the morning. Some days it’s better if you pull the covers...

First page (roughly) of my MS. I'm still heavily editing a few sections of the story, but the first third is in good shape and so I'm looking to get feedback on how it opens. Anything is helpful (hook, flow, voice, style, you name it). Many, many thanks in advance. :) --------- Today is the last da...

This is currently the opening to my book aka my prologue. Do you think it is a good enough hook or should I just get rid of it? Prologue The sound of boots kissing agree with other post that kissing while unique, does not seem like the right word the marble floor resounded down the long hallway, ri...

Hello! I got such great feedback on my query attempt I decided to submit my 1st page as well. Clunky or unclear prose? Telling vs. showing? Boring or cliche? Would you turn the page? Any comments, suggestions, etc. welcome. Thanks for taking a look, and I'll be happy to return the review! *** Raven...

Now that I think about it I'm not really surprised you didn't understand my "captain exposition" comment. Sometimes I forget that certain words and phrases were coined by me, and thus totally incomprehensible to the rest of the world. I suppose it is like captain obvious, only you know, ex...

I'm a compulsive Facebook and NB forum checker. Whenever I have a moment where I don't know what to do, I usually go to those two sites. I've closed the web browser and then reopened it two minutes later...I don't know why, it's not like I'm expecting something new to have appeared, but I do it any...

So I will be the first to admit that I work the typical office job, 9-5. It could be worse, my boss and most of my coworkers are pretty cool (note: most not all!) and since I have only been there for 2 years it hasn't quite begun to suck out my soul yet. There are times when my job does remind me of...

Just thought I'd give this board a try. Just looking for a little feedback. I know most people who post here post YA fiction because that's what Nathan mainly represents, but I really love his blog, and thought I'd give this critque section a try. I've rewritten this opening several times, and was ...

Jupiter was always my favorite! I find that specific songs and specific artists work for certain projects. My current WiP, there are several Deathcab for Cutie songs that always bring to mind a certain scene or a specific character. But, there are definitely times when I prefer instrumental music be...

Ignore previous post of doom. As of one minute ago, my word count stands at: (drumroll) 10,019! I made it! I wrote more than 6,000 words today. Of course, in the middle portions the prose is a bit sparse, but overall I am happy with what I was able to accomplish in a weekend. So, how did everyone el...

She's not gonna make it captain! Thats what the voice in my head keeps saying. So I put myself down for 10K this weekend. Right now I stand at 5K. I didnt get a chance to write at all Saturday, and only briefly on Friday with most of my work getting down yesterday. So I have til the end of today to ...

After the great feedback with my first chapter, I am posting chapter 2. I don't feel comfortable with the beginning of this chapter, although readers have told me they like it and to leave it in. I really can't put my finger on what bothers me about it, so maybe someone else will see what I don't. ...