Nathan Bransford - The Forums

After pitching and getting a request for a full at a conference, I went home and happily sent it out. When the euphoria faded and I realized that my novel was not finished with its early revision process and therefore NOT fit for human consumption yet...I panicked! I sent the nice lady a very freake...

I think most of the grammatical mistakes are due to a bad case of Franken-query. I've taken the parts and pieces of different queries and tried to make them into one living breathing thing...It walks, but it can't talk and it don't sing. There's a whole other element that I need to get in there...So...

Dear Agent, Alamandine “Mandi” Croach is a half-faery Princess; the next in line for the crown of the Star Court in Faelyn. Her younger half brother has been kidnapped and even the strongest seekers cannot find him. She is also completely oblivious, her aunt has made sure of that. Her life revolves ...

Dear [Agent]: Seth Tucker is an old-fashioned kid. He prefers cameras to Camera <<This Part isn't very clear....but this is>>>> and wall screens to feed-planted pictures in his head. He doesn’t prefer his Wingtooth, <<The use of "Prefer" here is a little awkward the tooth-shaped implant th...

At a conference an Editor asked for a full of my novel - which I will be sending out shortly. Should I include that fact in a query letter to agents?

Dear Mr Bransford, Alamandine "Mandi" Croach knows she's half faery, but that didn't mean much to her. Her parents are dead, and though she and her full-fae aunt run a magical jewelry store in Philadelphia, she's nothing more than a Tufts-educated checkout girl. Just when things start to s...