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by CC13
February 14th, 2010, 7:41 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fiction Query: No *good* title yet.
Replies: 3
Views: 1108

Re: YA Fiction Query: No *good* title yet.

Sixteen - year - old Lily would rather goof off with her best friend Riley, while the rest of the girl - world just seems interested in getting his attention. She doesn’t need a tan and lying on a beach is boring, thank you very much. What does this sentence have to do with anything? The voice is n...
by CC13
February 14th, 2010, 7:13 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Critique my query please! "Blown to Smithereens"
Replies: 6
Views: 1364

Re: Critique my query please! "Blown to Smithereens"

Eliora's life is shattered by a midnight phone call. Her photographer husband Micha was killed by a suicide bomber while out for a beer with some buddies after a photo shoot in Tel Aviv Another thing about this sentence, once you work on it, needs to be more active. "Was" is more past tense, and th...