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by stardog911
April 10th, 2010, 8:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' rehauled :)

Any input is awesome thanks!
by stardog911
March 12th, 2010, 4:03 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun (shred away!)

I rehauled the prologue and added more detail. shred away!
by stardog911
March 12th, 2010, 2:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' revision

Thanks GeeGee. I will work with it rightaway here. I'm not comfortable with 17 year old elf Kat because she doesn't know she's an elf at first. I will work the rest though. Back inna bit.
by stardog911
February 26th, 2010, 12:49 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' revision

Had three people finish reading the whole book and good reviews from everyone. :) See if this query reads better! I want to try sending it out again. Thanks everyone!
by stardog911
February 26th, 2010, 12:48 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun revised (shred away!)

Had three people finish reading the whole book and good reviews from everyone. :) See if this reads better!
by stardog911
February 24th, 2010, 2:55 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun revised (shred away!)

k revision done. see if it reads better and more exciting right from the begining!
by stardog911
February 24th, 2010, 2:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' revision

k done the revision. sorry it took so long. Had to catch up to my real life! :)
by stardog911
February 20th, 2010, 10:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun'

lol no I don't live there. Just looked rock stairways up on the net, one in Ogden came up and I loved the scenery! A friend of mine lives in Ogden. She just finished her mission. :) As to the query, I will get to work on a revision on monday or tomorrow night. When I re-read it, I found the same thi...
by stardog911
February 17th, 2010, 10:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun'

Please Critique my revision! Check out the prologue as well!
by stardog911
February 17th, 2010, 10:15 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun(shred away!)

Thanks Lunetta! I have read over the prologue so many times that I wasn't sure if it sounded good anymore. =) I know what you mean about the sentences, my husband edits for me and he has this thing about hating periods.lol Now as for the mystery, do you mean about it being in Seattle? Let me know. T...
by stardog911
February 16th, 2010, 3:27 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Prologue Blood of Idhun

Thanks for the previous comments, here is hopefully my final edit. See how you like it. And please feel free to shred! :) The cloaked figure moved silently through the twilight paths of Liberty Park. He was just another shadow, blending among the deepening gloom of early evening. He easily slipped u...
by stardog911
February 16th, 2010, 1:42 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun'

Try this, hopefully more detail, less vague! =D
by stardog911
February 15th, 2010, 12:58 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)
Replies: 13
Views: 2969

Re: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)

Same as the rest, too much -ings. Let me know when you publish though, I'm hooked! Good Luck!
by stardog911
February 14th, 2010, 5:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3917

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun'

you guys are awesome! I really apreciate all the help. =)
by stardog911
February 14th, 2010, 2:41 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Opening page of my YA Steampunk novel
Replies: 15
Views: 3646

Re: Opening page of my YA Steampunk novel

Same as above. Drop the last line and just fade out the second to last. Like ...
Other than that, sounds like just my kind of book! Good work.