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by Ermo
September 1st, 2010, 10:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What Do You Cut?
Replies: 18
Views: 2693

Re: What Do You Cut?

Phew.... I'm glad others on here are "putter-inners." From all the blogs I read, you'd think nobody ever writes short. I was getting lonely (and a bit self-conscious). Anyway, if I do need to cut, I do a few things. First, I identify all of the passive sentences. If they work just fine as active (an...
by Ermo
August 3rd, 2010, 7:11 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner
Replies: 2
Views: 1227

Re: Looking for a Critique Partner

Awesome KatWalk - you sound like my perfect audience! I'll PM you and we'll work it out. Thanks!
by Ermo
August 3rd, 2010, 3:35 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner
Replies: 2
Views: 1227

Looking for a Critique Partner

I see there are some people doing the same on here but wasn't sure if everyone had paired off yet or not. I have completed the first draft of my novel, which I'll categorize as a comtemporary fiction with some light techno-thriller aspects. I'll need someone that has a smart phone or understands how...
by Ermo
July 20th, 2010, 11:46 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you celebrate finishing a book?
Replies: 30
Views: 7710

Re: How do you celebrate finishing a book?

Hey cheeky and karen - my definition of "finished" is completion of the first draft. Yeah, yeah I know there is still a ton of work to do after that but I think it's quite an accomplishment to finish a first draft. Plus, it gives you more opportunities to celebrate in the future (yay! my edits are d...
by Ermo
July 19th, 2010, 3:25 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Costco's impact on my sanity...I mean genre confusion
Replies: 9
Views: 1371

Re: Costco's impact on my sanity...I mean genre confusion

I agree with Mira. I would just identify a more broad genre and let the agents figure it out. If you have a killer query and book, the agent isn't going to care that maybe you misidentified the genre. Good luck.
by Ermo
July 19th, 2010, 10:40 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you celebrate finishing a book?
Replies: 30
Views: 7710

How do you celebrate finishing a book?

Wine? Vacation? Six pack? A naked run through the woods?

I am nearing completion of my second novel. I was too stupid to realize after my first one that I had actually accomplished something (as bad as that book was) so I did nothing except maybe sigh.... Not sure what I'll do this time.
by Ermo
June 16th, 2010, 12:56 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Creating an author web site
Replies: 19
Views: 3483

Creating an author web site

Ok, it's time, I think to put an author website out there. I'm going to be entering the query process soon and I've read that having an author website is a good way to show "you're serious." As if spending the time to write an 80,000 word+ book doesn't show you're serious enough... Where do you guys...
by Ermo
June 14th, 2010, 3:58 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Land Doesn't Leave
Replies: 8
Views: 1674

Re: The Land Doesn't Leave

You have a clear talent for writing and for turning a few phrases. I do think that this beginning has a couple of things I'd change. First, it's a bit too "try hard-y" for lack of a better phrase. It's the kind of writing where you get the feeling the writer is really showing off their chops but may...
by Ermo
June 14th, 2010, 2:01 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Which opener grabs you the most? Women's fiction.
Replies: 24
Views: 6803

Re: Which opener grabs you the most? Women's fiction.

I like opening #1 but rewrite the first sentence. I thought it was a bit awkward. I do think that maybe this scene isn't the best way to open. Why not get right to the action? Something clearly happens, why not start with the stepdad holding the kids or something like that?
by Ermo
June 14th, 2010, 1:54 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First page YA fantasy critique - open to any and all advice!
Replies: 10
Views: 2140

Re: First page YA fantasy critique - open to any and all advice!

I like that you start with a scene in which something is happening. A lot of people start with exposition that does nothing to pull you in. I think that perhaps this is a bit too emotion dependent here. I don't know the characters enough to really care if one is leaving or not. I don't know them wel...
by Ermo
June 14th, 2010, 12:00 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: When the first draft is done - what next?
Replies: 12
Views: 2107

Re: When the first draft is done - what next?

First thing you should do is pour yourself a drink. Congrats- you've completed a novel. That's pretty effing cool. Then, I'd recommend putting the MS away for a month or so. I'd write a short story to submit to literary mags and then return to the MS. I would do this BEFORE sending to beta readers. ...
by Ermo
June 10th, 2010, 11:33 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Another curious question - how many novels have you trunked?
Replies: 14
Views: 4399

Re: Another curious question - how many novels have you trunked?

One. Didn't even finish it. Perhaps I'll go back to it someday. Good character study, I think, but essentially plot less.
by Ermo
June 10th, 2010, 10:28 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 274025

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: THE DIM MAN Genre: Literary Fiction Tim Woodman hurried down the inside hallway of his condo building. Careful not to let his quick-step walking turn into a full-fledged run, Tim hoped to disguise his worst intentions from his neighbors. A scolding is what she'll get even though a beating is ...
by Ermo
May 20th, 2010, 5:12 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Historical Novel and Permissions
Replies: 1
Views: 469

Historical Novel and Permissions

Let's say I wanted to write a semi-fictional account of a real person - something like DEVIL IN THE WHITE CITY - based on actual historical references, etc., Do I need to get permission from anybody who may, say, "own the story" if that exists? Or can I just write it? The story I'm looking at is mor...
by Ermo
May 14th, 2010, 10:53 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: What happens when...
Replies: 11
Views: 1730

Re: What happens when...

The only thing that I'll add that I don't think anybody has said is that make sure that if you switch MCs that the second MC has a deep enough story to tell. Sometimes you get swept away in the moment (or at least I do) and think a certain character could be an MC only to discover that they don't ha...