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by Walker
January 19th, 2012, 1:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Horror Query HONOR: A ZOMBIE TALE
Replies: 12
Views: 2467

Re: Horror Query HONOR: A ZOMBIE TALE

Thank you Walker and Quill. Here is my updated version. Is it any better? Two years ago, Honor’s best friend sent her an e-mail warning of a suspected outbreak. Outbreak of what? viral outbreak? just realized that this might be something the agent wonders about. He then promptly disappeared. The pa...
by Walker
January 18th, 2012, 10:55 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Horror Query HONOR: A ZOMBIE TALE
Replies: 12
Views: 2467

Re: Horror Query HONOR: A ZOMBIE TALE

Hi Madmcgee, like you, I am also new to the board, and I am working on writing a query. So I don't have a lot of experience with this but I can offer my opinion just as a reader. I am new to this blog and forum. I promise I will be active in posting to others' query drafts if I can get a little feed...
by Walker
January 14th, 2012, 12:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Dragon's Will MYSTERY
Replies: 3
Views: 1017

Re: Query: The Dragon's Will MYSTERY

I agree with Quill's remarks. I'd also suggest that you change the first sentence of the second paragraph so that Sam comes first, the actions come second. Maybe something like "Sam discovers a page marker..." The way it is now he seems sort of buried in that sentence.

Good luck with your query!
by Walker
December 30th, 2011, 1:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Rich Young Losers [YA]
Replies: 2
Views: 842

Re: Rich Young Losers [YA]

Hi L-live, just my first impressions here: I am not a reader or writer of YA so I am wondering: is drug use/selling something that is discussed in YA novels? It seems like in the second paragraph you start to do a bit of a countdown, with the sentences "In ten days David bails out on his prestigious...
by Walker
December 30th, 2011, 1:10 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Romance novel. Query. LOVE AFFAIR
Replies: 3
Views: 1182

Re: Romance novel. Query. LOVE AFFAIR

I think CharleeVale's comments are spot on. I got confused by all the different characters almost immediately. I would just focus on the core of your story. Good luck with your query!
by Walker
December 26th, 2011, 4:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: IN MY BLOOD - Paranormal YA
Replies: 4
Views: 1087

Re: IN MY BLOOD - Paranormal YA

Hi Geistwrite, I'm also trying to work out a query letter at the moment so I understand where you're coming from. I'm a total novice but I'm happy to give you some feedback simply as a reader. Hello All - - I've been trying out a few things on this query and could really use your feedback. It's a bi...
by Walker
December 26th, 2011, 2:47 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Game of Thrones
Replies: 30
Views: 8259

Re: Game of Thrones

I'm half-way through Game of Thrones and like some others here, I'm feeling fairly ambivalent. Martin is clearly a skilled writer, and I find his world very interesting, but there are so many characters and so much that seems irrelevant to the main plot. I have Mark Hodder's new Burton and Swinburne...
by Walker
December 16th, 2011, 10:26 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Weirdest Christmas/Holiday songs?
Replies: 10
Views: 3800

Re: Weirdest Christmas/Holiday songs?

How about "Christmas in Jail" by the Youngsters?

by Walker
December 15th, 2011, 10:03 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 627
Views: 232897

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hi, I'm Karen. I just discovered Nathan's blog and the forum this week. Both are incredible resources! I was working on my first (agonizing) query letter when a search turned up a great post by Nathan. Now I've spent hours reading posts and learning a ton of stuff. I'm very excited to see an active ...