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by askmonkey
January 4th, 2010, 2:04 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Reading Translations
Replies: 10
Views: 2448

Re: Reading Translations

The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo (by Steig Larsson) has done pretty well here, but I think this is an exception rather than an example of how well translated works do here in the US.
by askmonkey
January 4th, 2010, 2:00 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejected queries from big name authors?
Replies: 2
Views: 930

Re: Rejected queries from big name authors?

I haven't seen any query letters, but I saw Shannon Hale (Newbery award winning author) at an author event and she brought a laminated rejection letter reel to her signings to show everyone just how many rejection letters she got before getting published. (the answer was a lot!) Many of the letter w...
by askmonkey
January 4th, 2010, 1:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query critique -- Necklace of Tears
Replies: 13
Views: 3214

Query critique -- Necklace of Tears

Hi guys! Here is my query letter. I have had one positive response (out of two agents queried) but want to make it even better for further submissions. Please be honest-- I can handle it, I swear :) Specific question: last line of first paragraph comparing to famous authors -- I truly think the plot...
by askmonkey
January 4th, 2010, 1:12 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: e-mail submission question
Replies: 1
Views: 786

Re: e-mail submission question

You can make plain text look almost as professional as a formatted document. The idea of this is just so the agent/editor can scan through the email and get a sense of your writing. Make sure you still have enough white space between paragraphs and quotes for any dialogue, so that it doesn't come ou...
by askmonkey
December 30th, 2009, 8:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: EUPHORIA-- 1st query attempt!
Replies: 9
Views: 2242

Re: EUPHORIA-- 1st query attempt!

It is unfortunate timing, true, but if you are confident in you work and your writing, it is worth a shot. If you don't get anywhere, you can always sit on it for a while and try again! I think your story sounds interesting and it is clear that you have put a lot of thought into it. Overall feedback...
by askmonkey
December 29th, 2009, 8:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: (Revised) Beating the Heart- Query Critique :)
Replies: 18
Views: 3368

Re: (Revised) Beating the Heart- Query Critique :)

I like this synopsis much better. Much more succinct, lets us know that there are two storylines and that Michelle has a big sacrifice to make. The only thing that's missing would be to include Michelle's age somewhere so they can get a sense of who she is. More specific edits: Attempt 3 Dear Agent,...
by askmonkey
December 29th, 2009, 2:26 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Do you like Hardcovers?
Replies: 18
Views: 2964

Re: Do you like Hardcovers?

Now that I have a Kindle, when I buy a physical book I like to have the hardcover version---unless it is too heavy to hold. The book "Story of Edgar Sawtelle" (which I was given as a gift) was waaayyy too big for me to carry around and read. And seeing that many pages to flip through felt daunting. ...
by askmonkey
December 29th, 2009, 2:19 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What's your preference re: internal monologue in 3rd ppov?
Replies: 18
Views: 3329

Re: What's your preference re: internal monologue in 3rd ppov?

I agree. Go without the italics. Have you read How Fiction Works by James Wood? He shows numerous examples in classic and modern literature of seamless internal monologues in 3rd person. The book is a bit more literary than some how-to books but is an interesting read.
by askmonkey
December 29th, 2009, 1:36 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: (Revised) Beating the Heart- Query Critique :)
Replies: 18
Views: 3368

Re: Query Length

I'm glad you found my comments useful! I just wanted to say one thing--I completely agree with Kaitlyne that your novel sounds like YA. The protagonist is high school age, dealing with high school relationship/fitting in/parent problems (and supernatural ones too :) ) Actually when I read the query,...
by askmonkey
December 28th, 2009, 8:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: (Revised) Beating the Heart- Query Critique :)
Replies: 18
Views: 3368

Re: (Revised) Beating the Heart- Query Critique :)

Hi! This looks like an interesting story! I want to know more about the pulsapiens and about their superpowers, but I agree that the query feels way too long with too much detail. I got kind of bored in the middle while reading and your story isn't a boring one. Dear Agent, [this is where I'll attem...
by askmonkey
December 28th, 2009, 2:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG historical novel, query revised
Replies: 25
Views: 4109

Re: MG historical novel, query revised

Wow! What a powerful sounding story!! I'm not an agent, but I'd definitely be interested in reading it. I think your query letter is probably perfectly fine as is, but I thought I'd add some more suggestions for revision so you can figure out how to pare it down if needed. I didn't read everyone els...
by askmonkey
December 28th, 2009, 1:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Help - Hacked -Third round
Replies: 10
Views: 2173

Re: Query Help - Hacked -Third round

I think this works much better! I only have a two suggestions for tweaking further: Audrey Frincke is a lonely twenty-something hacker living in her uncle's house in the Boston suburbs. She gets shot at the mall while parading in a flash zombie mob-- was it personal, or was it her zombie Alice in Wo...
by askmonkey
December 18th, 2009, 5:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Help - Hacked -Third round
Replies: 10
Views: 2173

Re: Query Help - Hacked

I think your query letter is definitely much better after the revisions. Here are my suggestions for further revisions: Lonely hacker Audrey Frincke gets shot at the mall by a ninja. Was it the zombie Alice in Wonderland costume Audrey was wearing, or something personal? <--at first read I love thes...
by askmonkey
December 18th, 2009, 4:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Night Butterfly - latest query draft!
Replies: 19
Views: 3880

Re: Night Butterfly - query feedback welcome!

Hi! I'm new to the forum, but hope my comments can be useful! I think your story sounds interesting and I love the brevity of your query, but you have summarized to the point where it is a bit hard to follow. Here is your query with my comments in red: NIGHT BUTTERFLY is a 65,000 word London thrille...