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by NHWriter
February 12th, 2010, 8:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Wanted: Chosen One, Now Hiring (Fantasy) [REVISED]
Replies: 6
Views: 1586

Query - Wanted: Chosen One, Now Hiring (Fantasy) [REVISED]

So I spent an hour studying the five queries Janet Reid has give a thumbs up to at Query Shark , gutted my original query, and created this revision: Dear Query Shark Nashau was just sacked after thirty years as the Baron d'Bluefield's minister of prophecy. He got the baron’s son and heir killed. Al...
by NHWriter
February 3rd, 2010, 2:56 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Monkeys vs. Bears
Replies: 63
Views: 25233

Re: Monkeys vs. Bears

What about Monkees vs. Da Bears. Sure Ditka is driving, but I think all the girls trying to touch Davey Jones would cause such a glut on the field that the band could sneak into the end zone.
by NHWriter
February 3rd, 2010, 2:46 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Favorite quote
Replies: 55
Views: 10909

Re: Favorite quote

The two I have tattooed on my person are: "The righteous must be bold as a lion." "Drop the truth like a hammer." Others I enjoy are: "Nothing great ever arose to touch the skies unless some man dreamed that it could, some man thought that it should, and some man willed that it must." (Charles Kette...
by NHWriter
February 3rd, 2010, 12:43 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query--Legacy of the Empress (fantasy)
Replies: 15
Views: 3373

Re: Query--Legacy of the Empress (fantasy)

RebeccaKnight wrote:Okay, tweaking has been done. Does this make it less confusing? Or did I just make it worse? :P Thanks again for all your help!
Dramatic improvement. Well done!
by NHWriter
February 2nd, 2010, 3:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Dreamtraveler Query: Covenant (YA Fantasy)
Replies: 17
Views: 3647

Re: Dreamtraveler Query: Covenant (YA Fantasy)

Dear Beautiful, Kind, Intelligent Agent, (that's a joke, in case you don't hear tone-of-voice in emails like my father) This kind of intro gets used as an example of what not to do in a lot of agents'/slush lords' "how to" posts. And let me tell you, I have done the same and it never works. You ass...
by NHWriter
February 2nd, 2010, 2:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query--Legacy of the Empress (fantasy)
Replies: 15
Views: 3373

Re: Query--Legacy of the Empress (fantasy)

Hi Rebecca Here are my suggestions. I hope they help. First, you misspelled seeking in your first sentence. :) Second, I'm a big believer in Kristin Nelson's query design. Emulate back cover copy. BCC is a pitch meant to grab the attention of a prospective reader. A query is a pitch meant to grab th...
by NHWriter
December 17th, 2009, 12:32 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: So...Star Wars or Star Trek?
Replies: 45
Views: 12207

Re: So...Star Wars or Star Trek?

Nathan Bransford wrote:Only one correct answer, there is.
That's right: Firefly.